STAAR PREPARATION 2018 REVISING AND EDITING WARM UP

STAAR PREPARATION 2018 REVISING AND EDITING

WARM UP: Editing Skills ØRead the passage. ØFind and correct ten errors. ØLook for mistakes in spelling, capitalization, and commonly confused words. ØYou may work alone or with a partner. ØHow was you break?

MONDAY, 19 MARCH 2018 DLT: WILDCATS WILL USE STRATEGIES TO SUCCESSFULLY MASTER STAAR SKILLS

FYI: • We’re entering the LAST GRADING PERIOD!!! Be sure to keep up with all assignments so you don’t get behind. • STAAR countdown: there are 14 more school days before the EOC!

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Sloppy Text #1 One december evening, a woman left work and borded a bus for home. She was tired and her feet acked. It was Winter in 1955, the place was Montgomery, Alabama, and the women was black. As the bus became crowded and alot more white people got on, the woman was ordered to give up her seat. Their were no other empty spots, so this woman continued to sit right wear she was. That simple desision eventually led to the end of segregation in the south and ushered in a new era in the Civil rights Movement.

REVISING ON STAAR EOC ØMake improvements to written text, including: ØControlling idea/thesis statement ØTransition ØSentence combining/addition/removal ØSupporting details ØConclusion ØWord choice ØSentence structure (run-ons & fragments)

STRATEGIES FOR REVISING • Guided Practice: “Electric Cars Are Not the Right Choice”

CLOSURE: (2) Located deep in the desert of West Texas, this town of 2, 100 is the site of a spectacle, that has baffled observers for generations. What change should be made to sentence 2? A. Delete the comma after West Texas B. Change site to sight C. Change generations to generation’s D. Delete the comma after spectacle

WARM UP: Editing Skills ØRead the passage. ØFind and correct ten errors. ØLook for apostrophe, quotation, and plural or possessive errors

TUESDAY, 20 MARCH 2018 DLT: WILDCATS WILL USE STRATEGIES TO SUCCESSFULLY MASTER STAAR SKILLS

FYI: • We’re entering the LAST GRADING PERIOD!!! Be sure to keep up with all assignments so you don’t get behind. • STAAR countdown: there are 13 more school days before the EOC!

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Sloppy Text #2 Rosa Park’s was 42 years old, when she refused to give up the seat that was rightfully her’s. Her fateful act had not been planned ahead of time. “I did not get on the bus to get arrested”, she has said. “i got on the bus to go home. Montgomerys segregation laws at that time were complex. After paying the driver black people were required to get off the bus and get back on through the back entrance. If the white section of the bus filled up and another white person entered black’s were forced to give up their seats.

REVISING ON STAAR EOC ØMake improvements to written text, including: ØControlling idea/thesis statement ØTransition ØSentence combining/addition/removal ØSupporting details ØConclusion ØWord choice ØSentence structure (run-ons & fragments)

STRATEGIES FOR REVISING • Independent Practice: “An Inspirational Athlete” • This will be for a grade! (strategies AND correct answers)

Sentence Combining: Directions: Read each set of sentences then create ONE well structured, logical, correctly punctuated sentence per set by combining the ideas. The first set shows three possible answers. 1. My cousin enjoys classical music. She enjoys jazz. She is a music major. My cousin, who enjoys classical music and jazz, is a music major. A music major, my cousin enjoys classical music and jazz. 2. Helen was walking to church downtown. She saw a car accident. She ran to the nearest pay phone to call for help. 3. Martin was sick. He was unable to attend the party. The party was for his sister. It was her birthday. 4. I waited for the bus. I read a magazine while I waited. I also read a newspaper. 5. Sinclair is one of the largest community colleges in the United States. It is considered one of the best in the United States. It has many innovative programs. 6. Mohammad has been in America for two years. He speaks English well. He is originally from Jordan. 7. My sister is a math teacher. She has been a math teacher for ten years. Sometimes she wishes she was a lawyer. She likes to argue. 8. My friend is in the hospital. He was painting his house. He fell off a ladder. 9. The student was removed from the room. He was yelling at the teacher. He was yelling at the students. The student was removed by two security guards. 10. The president of the college resigned. She moved to Canada. She hoped to write and relax for awhile.

Sentence Combining: Directions: Read each set of sentences then create ONE well structured, logical, correctly punctuated sentence per set by combining the ideas. The first set shows three possible answers. 1. My cousin enjoys classical music. She enjoys jazz. She is a music major. My cousin, who enjoys classical music and jazz, is a music major. A music major, my cousin enjoys classical music and jazz. My cousin, a music major, enjoys classical music and jazz. 2. Helen saw a car accident. She ran to the nearest pay phone to call for help. 3. Martin was sick. He was unable to attend the party. The party was for his sister. It was her birthday. 4. I waited for the bus. I read a magazine while I waited. I also read a newspaper. 5. Sinclair is one of the largest community colleges in the United States. It is considered one of the best in the United States.

Continued… 6. Mohammad has been in America for two years. He speaks English well. He is originally from Jordan. 7. My sister is a math teacher. She has been a math teacher for ten years. Sometimes she wishes she was a lawyer. She likes to argue. 8. My friend is in the hospital. He was painting his house. He fell off a ladder. 9. The student was removed from the room. He was yelling at the teacher. He was yelling at the students. The student was removed by two security guards. 10. The president of the college resigned. She moved to Canada. She hoped to write and relax for awhile.

CLOSURE: (2) Located deep in the desert of West Texas, this town of 2, 100 is the site of a spectacle, that has baffled observers for generations. What change should be made to sentence 2? A. Delete the comma after West Texas B. Change site to sight C. Change generations to generation’s D. Delete the comma after spectacle

CLOSURE: (12) The affect of the spectacle is a new admiration for the unusual and creative culture that is found in Marfa, Texas. What change should be made to sentence 12? A. Change affect to effect B. Change Marfa to marfa C. Delete the comma after Marfa. D. Change the period to an exclamation point

WARM UP: Editing Skills ØRead the passage. ØTHE FIRST PERSON TO FIND 20 ERRORS WILL WIN 10 TICKETS ØLook for capitalization, spelling, commonly confused words, punctuation, and quotation errors. ØYou may work alone or with a partner.

WEDNESDAY, 21 MARCH 2018 DLT: WILDCATS WILL USE STRATEGIES TO SUCCESSFULLY MASTER STAAR SKILLS

FYI: • We’re entering the LAST GRADING PERIOD!!! Be sure to keep up with all assignments so you don’t get behind. • STAAR countdown: there are 12 more school days before the EOC!

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Sloppy Text #3 Directions: Find the 20 mistakes in the paragraph below. Look for capitalization, spelling, commonly confused words, punctuation, and quotation errors. Rosa parks was not the first person to be detaned for her offense. Eight months earlier Claudette Colvin a fifteen-year-old girl refused to give up her seat on a bus, she was arrested. In October a young woman named Mary louise Smith was arrested. Smith paid the fine. And was released. When December came around and Rosa stepped on bored the bus, she new exactly what NOT to do: don’t frown, don’t struggle, don’t shout, and don’t pay the fine. After her arrest Rosa’s bale was posted by Clifford Burr, a white Lawyer who’s wife had employed Park’s as a seamstress. “As I said before, Rosa reminded an audience years later, I got on that bus to go home. Not to be

WHOSE VS WHO’S • Who’s = a contraction (like it’s and that’s) –Who’s means WHO IS –EX: who’s hungry? • Whose = possession (or ownership) –Whose means who something BELONGS to –EX: whose sandwich is this?

REVIEW • Lets review our answers on “An Inspirational Athlete”

EDITING ON STAAR EOC ØMake corrections to written text, including: ØPunctuation ØCapitalization ØSpelling ØWord choice ØCommonly confused words ØCommas ØQuotes ØSentence combining ØApostrophes ØPronouns & antecedents

STRATEGIES FOR EDITING • Guided Practice: “Island Oasis”

CLOSURE: (19) Most of the recent proposed explanations are more believable then flying dinosaurs, however. What change is needed in sentence 19? A. Insert a comma after explanations B. Change believable to beleivable C. Change then to than D. Delete the comma after dinosaurs

WARM UP: Select the correct sentence 1. A. My family took me to dinner and a movie to celebrate my birthday. B. Running through the park on a sunny afternoon. C. Even though I studied for hours. D. Putting on my roller blades and skating all afternoon. 2. A. Their building a new mall a few blocks down the street from my neighborhood. B. I’d like to get your opinion about which dress I should buy for the dance. C. My stomach hurts because I ate to much dessert.

WHOSE VS WHO’S • Who’s = a contraction (like it’s and that’s) –Who’s means WHO IS –EX: who’s hungry? • Whose = possession (or ownership) –Whose means who something BELONGS to –EX: whose sandwich is this?

THURSDAY, 22 MARCH 2018 DLT: WILDCATS WILL USE STRATEGIES TO SUCCESSFULLY MASTER STAAR SKILLS

FYI: • We’re entering the LAST GRADING PERIOD!!! Be sure to keep up with all assignments so you don’t get behind. • STAAR countdown: there are 11 more school days before the EOC!

Order from Amazon or Barnes & Noble We’ll begin using it on Monday, April 9.

Sentence Editing 1. My family took me to dinner and a movie to celebrate my birthday. Running through the park on a sunny afternoon. Even though I studied for hours. Putting on my rollerblades and skating all afternoon. 2. Their building a new mall a few blocks down the street from my neighborhood. I’d like to get your opinion about which dress I should buy for the dance. My stomach hurts because I ate to much dessert. Mira wondered who’s project would win the science fair competition.

EDITING ON STAAR EOC ØMake corrections to written text, including: ØPunctuation ØCapitalization ØSpelling ØWord choice ØCommonly confused words ØCommas ØQuotes ØSentence combining ØApostrophes ØPronouns & antecedents

STRATEGIES FOR EDITING • Independent Practice: “Vote for Me!”

MAKE CORRECTIONS: CAPITALIZATION, PUNCTUATION, QUOTATION ETC… 1. Chris paul was shoved by a player on the Minnesota timberwolves Gorgui Dieng. 2. Gerald green then shoved gorgui dieng to stand up for his teammate chris paul. 3. green knew he would get punished but this is didnt effect his decision. 4. chris pauls comment on the inncident was Ill pay whatever fine green gets. 5. After the game green was fined 25000 dollars by the nba.

CLOSURE: (14) Even World War II pilots, training at the nearby midland army air field, tried to find the source of the lights—this time from the air– but they, too, found nothing. What change needs to be made in sentence 14? A. Change too to two B. Change World War II to world war II C. Change midland army air field to Midland Army Air Field D. Insert a comma after but

WARM UP: Editing Skills ØRead each sentence. ØOne sentence is correct. Circle it. ØMake necessary corrections to each of the incorrect sentences. ØYou may work alone or with a partner.

FRIDAY, 23 M AR CH 2018 DLT: WILDCATS WILL USE STRATEGIES TO SUCCESSFULLY MASTER STAAR SKILLS

FYI: • We’re entering the LAST GRADING PERIOD!!! Be sure to keep up with all assignments so you don’t get behind. • STAAR countdown: there are 10 more school days before the EOC!

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Sentence Editing 3. I studied for my social studies test and finished my essay for English. Jerome went to the store for his mother but he forgot to buy some milk. Kristen wanted to take a nap, so Maria went shopping alone. Because it was raining I took my umbrella to school. 4. The children’s shoes were scattered all over the living room floor. It was so cold there were icicles hanging from the deers’ antlers. My brothers’ foot is broken, so he has to wear a cast for six to eight weeks. The party is at 8 o’clock at Jons’ house.

REVISING & EDITING TEST • All phones should be silenced and placed in the pocket that corresponds to your seat number. • Bags, purses, and backpacks are zipped shut and stored in a designated location. • You must use the strategies on your test. (12 points) • Answer each question carefully. (8 points

AFTER THE QUIZ: WRITING TERRITORIES ØFill in the brain portion of the territories with people, places, and ideas you know about that might be good topics or examples for STAAR EOC essay writing. ØFill in the heart portion of the territories with people, places, and ideas you care about that might be good topics or examples for STAAR EOC essay writing. ØFYI: Common themes of expository essays include honesty, friendship, obstacles, determination, courage, stress, happiness, success, failure, humor, change, risk, maturity (coming of age ideas), hope, sacrifice, relationships, values (morals), integrity, respect, priorities, cooperation, collaboration, etc.

CLOSURE: (24) Residents homes go up in value as they make home improvements such as adding a pool or an outdoor fireplace, and many are even able to make money selling their homes for more than they purchased them for. What change should be made to sentence 24? A. Change Residents to Residents’ B. Insert a comma after improvements C. Change their to there D. Delete the comma after fireplace