To revise the cluster To revise what makes

To revise the cluster To revise what makes a good paragraph To write a pair of paragraphs and gain feedback

You will need: � A parent, sibling or other sentient being � A stopwatch or phone with timer function � Pass the timer to your nominated person � Press “Next” on the slideshow and talk about the poem named for 1 whole minute � You might talk about the writer, themes, the imagery, quotations you can remember, how it makes you feel… � No repetitions, no significant “erms” or delays

War Photographer

Remains

Barbie-Girl by Aqua

Bayonet Charge

The Emigree

Poppies

AO 2 – what methods are used and how do they portray the effect? AO 3 – what do you come to understand about the impact in the poem and in “the world” HOW LASTING EFFECT OF CONFLICT PRESENTED ONE AO 1 – link one paragraph on an effect explored in WP with another explored in a poem of your choice.

War Photographer Isolation “finally alone” (beg’ & end of poem) “they do not care” (pronoun – us and them) Desensitized “spools of suffering set out in ordered rows” (sibilance, juxtaposition of order and suffering) “to do what someone must” (aux’ verb) Traumatized “his hands, which did not tremble then but seem to now” (verb, hand symbolism) “A half-formed ghost” (imagery, comp’ adj’) ? ? ?

(Look back at Lesson 1 -2 slide 21 for extra help) � A clear topic sentence. � At least one quotation but perhaps two, if the second one BOLSTERS the message of the first. � Analyse the methods within the quotation and explain clearly how they contribute towards the effect. � Think about how the methods are likely to effect readers in light of the context of conflict’s impact.

� Your paragraphs will automatically link if you are answering the question. � Useful words to use in your second paragraph to signpost the link though might be “unlike/instead of/similar to/better than Duffy’s use of [method] is this writer’s use of… � You may wish to compare the specific backdrops of the poems (AO 3) too such as exploring why the effect on a photographer might be similar or different to a soldier/veteran/mother/child

� Now write a pair of paragraphs on a WORD document and attach it to a politely worded email asking your teacher to give you feedback. � Make sure the email is received by your teacher no later than Thursday 7 th May � Please email to Miss. LBeecroft@sjfchs. org. uk