OPENENDING COMPOSITION 1 What happened 2 What happened

OPEN-ENDING COMPOSITION

开放性写作出题方式： 1 根据结果，解释原因 What happened? 2根据事件，接续故事 What happened next? What did you do with. . . ? What should you do. . . ? How will you introduce your school to them? 3提出问题，给出建议

海淀二模： When your mother comes home from work. , she finds the living room in a terrible mess. She asks you the reasons. You tell her what happened. 审题：人称-- I, 时态 -- 过去时 叙事--- 根据结果，解释原 因。

说明文的写作方法： 列举法----用事例说明主题可用表示顺 序的示意词来突出每个实例。如： first, second, third, first, secondly, finally, the first thing (point) is…, the second thing (point) is…, the third thing(point) is…, first of all, also, finally, one, another, the last…

以事物的重要性来排列顺序，可使 文章层次清楚，重点突出。 如： for one thing, also, the worst thing is…, first of all, apart from that, the most important is…, for one thing, what is more, the most…, one important, more importantly, the most important…,

one problem. . , another problem…, the most serious problem…,

Topic sentence whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks Supporting sentence 1 60% of the students are against the idea of the entrance fees. (A) to have a rest and enjoy themselves in the park (A) to become necessary to build gates and walls, (A) to do harm to the appearance of the city.

Supporting sentence 2 40% think that fees should be charged (B) need money to pay gardeners and other workers (B) to buy plants and young trees. (B) fees should be charged low.

Income * American *Chinese sources *students -----------------------Parents *50% *90% -----------------------Part-time jobs * 35% *5% ------------------------scholarships *15% *5%

The income of the American and the Chinese students comes through almost the same channels: parents, part-time jobs and scholarships, but the percentage of each is quite different. Half the American students’ income is from their parents, thirty-five percent from part- time jobs, and fifteen from scholarships. Chinese students, on the other hand, get ninety percent of their income from their parents.

In my opinion, there are two main reasons for this. One is that Chinese parents care so much for their children that it is almost unthinkable for students to live on their own. The other is that Chinese students have fewer chances to find part-time jobs.

Wish you success

写作常见错误： 1 动词与主语关系不清 误：I saw an old man going out of City Park and was about to cross Park Road. 正：I saw an old man going out of City Park and he was about to cross Park Road.

误：But the car ran off immediately instead of stopping to apologize to the man. 正：But the driver drove off immediately instead of stopping to apologize to the man.

误：The park should charge the entrance fee. 正：The entrance fee should be charged for parks. 正：People should pay for the entrance fee if they go to the parks.

2 句子之间的逻辑关系不清 误：It hit the old man down but the driver, a woman, didn’t stop her car. Finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away. The old man and I saw the car’s number. It’s AC 864. The old man couldn’t move , I decided to help him.

正：It hit the old man down but the driver, who was a woman, didn’t stop her car. Finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away. Fortunately, I saw the car’s number. It’s AC 864. Noticing the old man couldn’t move, I decided to help him.

3画蛇添足 、过多的长句使句子复杂 化（语言不简洁） 修改前： A famous sportsman was giving a speech which was rather interesting. 修改后： A famous sportsman was giving an interesting speech.

修改前 Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. The air pollution is becoming more and more serious which is caused by buses and cars. What’s more, so many rivers are polluted by dirty water which is from factory. In addition, sandstorm struck us now and then, from which we suffered a lot.

修改后 Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. As a result, people have to suffer sandstorms now and then. What’s more, as buses and cars give off a lot of poisonous gases, the air is getting dirtier and dirtier. Moreover, there are many rivers polluted by dirty water from factories. The situation is becoming more and more serious.

修改前： As soon as came in, we heard some voice made by instruments. There were some students playing piano violin and so on. 修改后： As soon as we came in, we heard a piece of beautiful music played by the students by different instruments, such as, piano, violin and so on.

4 过于简单的句子使文章缺少逻辑 性，可读性。 修改前 Yesterday, there was a policeman in the street. He stopped a car. The car was at the corner. It looked like a Honda. There was a boy on the sidewalk. He was riding his bicycle. The bicycle was a two-wheeler. The car nearly knocked down the boy.

修改后 Yesterday, a policeman stopped a car —Honda at the corner of the street, because it nearly knocked down a boy who was riding a two-wheel bicycle on the sidewalk.

修改前 Suddenly, a car run quickly from the third street and turned to the west. The car didn’t stop and hit the old man. The driver didn’t stop and have a look. The car ran away quickly. The car was yellow and the driver was a woman.

修改后 Suddenly, a car turned west from the 3 rd Street to the Park Road. It hit the old man, but it didn’t stop and ran away quickly. I noticed the car was yellow and the driver was a woman.