Transactional or Formal writing INTRODUCTION Your focustopicopinion HOOK

Transactional or Formal writing

INTRODUCTION Your focus/topic/opinion HOOK the reader BODY TEER (one TEER per paragraph) You can have as many TEER paragraphs as you wish. CONCLUSION Remind the reader what your topic is about.

Writing an introduction • General statement about your topic o Describe a situation e. g. How poverty looks like in NZ? o Define a key word in your topic • Signposting: tell the reader the key points in your assignment o To understand. . . (your topic) this essay aims to provide a discussion of. . . (the ideas you will develop) o This essay seeks to investigate/evaluate/illustrate/discuss the impact of. . . (your topic) in relation to. . . (the ideas you will develop) o Firstly, this assignment examines. . . (your topic) and its links with. . . (your first idea) Next, it closely examines. . . in relation to. . . (your next idea) Finally, it focuses on. . . and how this affects. . . (your next idea)

Writing an introduction An introduction often ends on thesis statement. It begins with a broad statement and gradually narrows down until it directly addresses the question: This order of introduction elements is not set in stone, however. Sometimes thesis statement is followed by a breakdown of the essay's structure and organisation. Ultimately, you must adapt the order to suit the needs of each particular essay.

Examples of introduction Education means considerably more than just teaching a student to read, write, and manipulate numbers. Computers, the Internet, and advanced electronic devices are becoming essential in everyday life and have changed the way information is gathered. How this new technology is utilized in the curriculum and managed by teachers will have an important role to play in widening the resource and knowledge base for all students. Technology affects the way teachers teach and students learn. To make the best use of information technology (IT), schools need a workable plan to fully integrate it into all aspects of the curriculum so students are taught how, why, and when to use technology to further enhance their learning. This essay aims to discuss the different ways schools can take advantage of IT and its impact on students’ learning.

Assignment essays are developed from set questions that give students a period of time to research a topic and produce their answer with references to their sources of information. While there are some disadvantages with using assignment essays as an assessment tool, there are sound educational purposes underpinning this practice. This essay examines the reasons why assignment essays are beneficial for student learning and considers some of the problems with this method of assessment.

Does your child play violent games? Could your child be the next trigger happy criminal? Is violent gaming a prime influence on teenage violence? Kids should not be playing R 16 and R 18 games when they are only 14. How closely are the age restrictions on games followed? Nowadays, the age restrictions on games are not followed very closely. Most of the time, the person who buys the game are the required age, but the people who play that bought game are underage. This leads to children playing violent and inappropriate games that could be harmful for their future. This essay seeks to investigate the reasons of violent youth behaviours in relation to the types of violent behaviour at home and at school.

There is a topic that has a lot of women in rage, and men rolling their eyes and sighing. Sexism is like a hideous beast which attack women and men may choose to ignore its existence. Many may think that in a developed nation, sexism is not a problem as opposed to the situation in Middle East, where women wear hjiabs and long sleeves in 25 degree plus, heat. On the contrary, studies have shown that even in many developed countries, men are paid more than women and unfaithful men are seen more acceptable than cheating women. This essay will expose the reality of sexism in developed nations as well as illustrate the ways in which women are treated unfairly in a society where men and women seemingly enjoy equal rights.

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In his famous speech, Martin Luther King said, “I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character. ” It has been almost 5 decades since then and how many countries in today’s world can proudly say that they have achieved this? It is not a surprise that many countries are still taunted by the existence of racism but it is shocking that there are still those who still allow racism to proliferate and cripple their nations. To understand the impact of racism, this essay aims to provide evidence of its causes and effects on today’s society.

Introduction – What’s wrong here? Main topic: Gender inequality There is a topic that has a lot of women in a rage, and men rolling their eyes and sighing. They may not know that this hideous beast, sexism, has struck. I am thankful that I live in a country where women have rights, not like in the Middle East, where women wear hijabs and long sleeves in 25 degree plus, heat. Although I do live in a privileged country, I AFI: Say what the still however have a few quibbles with its attitude towards women. Studies show that even in this western culture, men specific are paid more than women and unfaithful men are seen more argument is acceptable than cheating women. Being seen as the weaker one has great disadvantages, such as sometimes being seen as slaves and not being allowed to do certain activities men are allowed to do.

Body - TEER T E E R Topic sentence Explain by adding details so that your reader “gets it”. Specific example and/or quotations Relate to topic

Example 1 One significant lifestyle factor affecting patients with heart conditions is occupation. Clearly, problems can arise where an individual with a heart condition has a high pressure, stressful individual with a heart condition has a high pressure, stressful occupation. At the time of his first heart failure, Eric was working as an editor on a national newspaper. He worked long hours, did shift work, had irregular meal breaks and sometimes worked to very tight deadlines. In his own words, his job had 'an to very tight deadlines. adverse effect' on his health – it was a significant cause of stress in his life at that time.

Example 2 Hunger can be be defined as as a a strong desire or or need for food and is is In some serious cases where considered as an extreme form of poverty. In some serious cases where people cannot afford their basic nutrition requirements, hunger leads to people cannot afford their basic nutrition requirements, hunger leads to According to death not only for adults but for children as well. According to aa UNICEF death not only for adults but for children as well. children died before they report published in 2005, about 10. 1 million children these deaths occurred in in reached the age of five. The majority of these in sub-Saharan Africa and developing countries, three-quarters of them in South Asia, the two regions with high levels of citizens suffering from South Asia, the two regions with high levels of citizens suffering from hunger and malnutrition. Hunger contributes directly but also indirectly in hunger and malnutrition. the death of these children as their immune systems were significantly weakened due to extreme hunger and malnutrition.

Body – What’s wrong here? Main idea: Unequal pay The National Management Salary Survey has shown that sexism is wide spread, with women getting paid AFI: less than men even though they do the same job. This is unfair and sexist because women can do a job as Provide well as any man, if not better. To see a women just as specific evidence e. g. she is and not how good a job she did, would enrage What job? any woman. Imagine how angry you would be if you What is the found out that your male co-worker is getting paid more than you. As women we should speak out about salary difference? it and do everything we can to change this.

INTEGRATING YOUR EVIDENCE Evidence • • Quotations Statistics Anecdotes Specific examples Use APA style. Many terms may be used to introduce quoted material: asserts, believes, claims, comments, confirms, declares, defines, describes, explains, indicates, makes clear, proposes etc. However, these terms are not interchangeable. Make your choice based on your meaning.

Writing a conclusion • Remind the reader what your topic/focus is about • Signposting: tell the reader the key points in your assignment o Clearly, this essay has shown that the main factors which impact upon. . . (your topic) are. . . (summarise your main ideas) o The evidence presented in this assignment has shown that. . . (mention the conclusions you have drawn) o To conclude, this assignment has addressed a number of significant issues which show that. . . (mention the conclusions you have drawn)

The evidence presented in this assignment have shown that until parents and teachers teach that women are equals and deserve to be treated like one, we will continue to become the victims of sexism. As women today, we should stand up against employers who refuse to pay us the same amount as our male coworkers and point out the fact that unfaithful males should be frowned upon as much as cheating females. Forget about being the weaker vessel and start being the stronger one! Become the modern woman and make sexism a thing of the past.

To conclude, this assignment has addressed a number of significant issues which show that gaming is a prime influence on teenage violence. To improve this situation, apart from including a school programme to educate children in their choice of computer games, new laws need to be enforced and game-raters need to be harsher. Most importantly, parents must realise the impact of not constraining their children in gaming.

Conclusion – What’s wrong here? Main idea: Gender inequality AFI: Use the same point of view. Therefore, until parents and teachers teach that women are equals and deserve to be treated like one, they will continue to become the victims of sexism. As women today we should stand up against employers who refuse to pay us the same amount as our male coworkers and point out the fact that unfaithful males should be frowned upon as much as cheating females. Forget about being the weaker vessel and start being the stronger one! Become the modern woman and make sexism a thing of the past.

Language features YES Use different sentence starters. Use nominalisation. NO No contractions. No “I” e. g. This essay discusses the importance of. . . This research shows that. It could be said that. . . Use passive voice. No vague words like “people” or “something”. Use linking words to join sentences and/or paragraphs. No time phrases like “in the past” or “in recent times” Use correct tense. Use synonymns. Use academic vocabulary e. g. use “obtain” instead of “get”

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