Developing Descriptive Writing Look at the picture again
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Developing Descriptive Writing
Look at the picture again closely. Then read Description A & Description B.
Description A Beyond the bridge is an old lock (short confined section of a waterway).
Description B Beyond the low wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forgotten and motionless as if trapped by the strange, haunting trees that surround it.
Think about the descriptions. Which one do you like the best and why?
So, What is Descriptive Writing? (P. S. This is what you write) • Good writing comes from close observation of people, places, objects, and even our own feelings and emotions. • The moon with its wisps of white light hung suspended in the frosty air over the still, quiet countryside. He could see in all directions, from the majestic mountains to the vast ocean on the other. • The reader can certainly SEE the moon and the countryside. Notice the images of color and shape. • Descriptive writing focuses on observation, is static, and paints pictures with words.
Description A – This is a very simple description, the reader does not have to think very much. It just tells you what is there. Beyond the wall is an old lock.
Description B – Here the writer has taken the simple description and added to it. Now the reader has to think and use imagination. Beyond the low, wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forgotten and motionless as if trapped by the strange, haunting trees that surround it. Let’s look more closely.
Descriptive Writing Beyond
Descriptive Writing Beyond the low wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forg
Beyond the low, wooden bridge the old lock sleeps. Adjectives – ‘low, wooden and old’ - used to describe the bridge and the lock. Verb / Personification – ‘sleeps’– The writer has made the lock seem human.
The writer has also used the word ‘haunting’ suggests something mysterious or frightening. With this one word the writer has introduced a sense of mystery. Just what is happening in the picture?
What else can the writer use? Let’s add another sentence to Description B.
Description B Beyond the low wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forgotten and motionless as if trapped by the strange haunting trees that surround it. Their branches are like a tall giant’s fine fingers grasping at the walls. What has the writer used now?
Their branches are like a tall giant’s fine, fingers grasping at the walls. Simile – ‘like’– the writer has said the subject is like something else. It adds to the picture in the reader’s imagination. Alliteration – ‘fine, fingers’ – words with the same beginning sound used one after another. It sounds super!
Onomatopoeia The formation of a word from a sound associated with what is named (ex. A-choo, BAM, WHAM)
What makes good descriptive writing? In some ways it is like building a wall, the writer needs to use the right building blocks?
These are just a few. Remember to use the building blocks! Similes Alliteration Personification Adjectives Onomatopoeia
Your Mission (AKA Assignment) • Your assignment will requires you to write a descriptive piece based on a picture of your choice. • Before you start, you will get a planning page and a hand out that has a whole bunch of terms and words you can use in your descriptive writing.
These are just some of the building blocks! Similes Alliteration Personification Adjectives
Now look at some different pictures of Fourteen Locks. Make a mind map of your ideas for description. Use your ideas to write exciting descriptive sentences.