Who is to blame for Romeo and Juliets

Who is to blame for Romeo and Juliet’s deaths?

Evidence n The EVIDENCE that you choose needs to support the main idea. Look at your three body paragraphs: ¡ ¡ n Does the evidence support the main idea? Read the first sentence and then skip directly to the evidence (quote). If it does not clearly support it, find another piece of evidence. In choosing your EVIDENCE, do not use dialogue between two people or a mixture of dialogue and narration.

Citations n In response to Romeo’s request, the apothecary gives in by saying, “My poverty, but not my will, consents” (5. 1. 79). ¡ ¡ Parentheses are around the act/scene/line(s). Period comes after the parentheses (not inside the quotes)

Intro To Evidence n Read the INTRO to EVIDENCE and EVIDENCE in your three body paragraphs: ¡ Are there 2 -4 sentences in the intro to evidence before the evidence (quote)? ¡ Does the intro to evidence give enough background on what is happening before the evidence is introduced? ¡ Is all the information relevant? (More does not always mean better. ) ¡ Is the transition between intro to evidence and evidence seamless?

Signal Phrases n Are your own words connected to the quote like in the example below? The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use Spanish words” (136). ¡ Comma needed after the signal phrase ¡ Some common signal phrases: states, says, narrates, recalls, asks, wonders, exclaims

Signal Phrases ¡ Do not say, “In the text it says…” or “The evidence to support this is…” Instead, tell me who says or thinks the quoted line. n Incorrect: In the text it says “Hamadi liked to use Spanish words. ” n Correct: The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use Spanish words. ”

Link ¡ ¡ Are there at least 2 -3 sentences of analysis here? Does your link clearly explain how the evidence supports your main idea? Does the link clearly explain what the quote means and it’s importance? But the link should NOT explicitly state the phrases this quote means or this quote says. If those actual phrases are in the paragraph, cross them off (and make sure the sentence still makes sense. )

Concluding Sentence n Look at the Make sure it is not the exact same wording as the main idea sentence. ¡ Make sure it restates the idea of the main idea and summarizes the evidence. ¡

Transitions n n Make sure transitions are smooth between paragraphs and between sentences (not all sentences require this direction, but it helps weave the meaning throughout the paper in some cases). Often, a dependent clause transitions nicely from one paragraph to another. Use it at the beginning of the new paragraph. Not at the end of the previous paragraph. ¡ Example: While it may be true the speaker from “Borrowed Tongue” smoothly integrated his two cultures and languages, the narrator from “I want to be Miss America” never really felt she could. ¡ Example: Although the apothecary sold the poison to Romeo, it was actually Romeo who decided to use it.

Examples of Transitions n If you want to show: n n n Illustration: thus, for example, namely, in other words, specifically Contrast: however, yet, conversely, but, in spite of Addition: furthermore, moreover, equally important, similarly, consequently Time: after, formerly, rarely, meanwhile, ordinarily, simultaneously Space: beneath, under, surrounding, opposite, in the distance, beyond, adjacent Concession: although, granted that, while it may be true, in spite of Emphasis: Indeed, truly, certainly, surely, furthermore Details: specifically, in particular, to enumerate, namely, including Examples: for example, to illustrate, thus, for instance Consequence or Result: so that, thus, consequently, hence, accordingly, due to Summary: therefore, thus, as a result, accordingly

Writing in 3 rd Person n In third person, the writer avoids the pronouns I, we, my, our, my, mine, your, yours, ours. Writing in the third person allows the writer to come across as unbiased and thus more informed. n When revising for the third person, writers should go sentence by sentence to locate first person pronouns and to then replace those pronouns with a third person construction. Here’s an example: I think Juliet is to blame for the deaths of Romeo and Juliet. Revised: Juliet is to blame for the deaths of Romeo and Juliet.

Commas in Compound Sentences FANBOYS (For, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) n Independent clause, + FANBOYS word + Independent clause n If a FANBOYS word joins two independent clauses, please make sure to insert the comma before the FANBOYS word. Example: The Capulets didn’t invite Romeo to the ball, but he came anyway.

Commas in Complex Sentences Dependent Clause Markers: after, although, as if, because, before, even if, even though, if, in order to, since, though, unless, until, whatever, whenever, whether, and while n If a dependent clause begins a sentence, then place a comma after the clause. n If I had a million dollars, I would travel around the world. (“If” is a dependent clause marker) n If a dependent clause is at the end of a sentence do not use a comma. n He went to the war because he was too ashamed to stay home. (“Because” is a dependent clause marker)

Formatting ¡ ¡ Typed in 12 point Times New Roman font Double spaced 1 inch margins Proper MLA heading in the top left (heading is also double spaced): Beyonce Knowles Ms. Mueller/Mr. Kraft 7 th Grade Language Arts 30 May 2013