WARM UP LIST AS MANY FACTS ABOUT THE

WARM UP: LIST AS MANY FACTS ABOUT THE ROOM AS YOU CAN. REMEMBER JUST THE FACTS!!! CONCRETE DETAIL

WARM UP: NOW LIST AT LEAST ONE COMMENT ABOUT EACH OF THE FACTS LISTED… COMMENTARY

USING THE CD/CM WRITING METHOD TO ANSWER CONSTRUCTED RESPONSE QUESTIONS

One-Paragraph 1. Topic sentence 2. Concrete Detail 3. Commentary 4. Commentary (TS) (CD) (CM) 5. Concrete Detail 6. Commentary 7. Commentary (CD) (CM) 8. Concluding Sentence (CS) CHUNK

1 CHUNK PARAGRAPH FORMAT TS CD CM CM CS Topic Sentence (Focus + CM) Concrete Detail (Fact) Commentary (Opinion) Concluding Sentence (CM)

TS - TOPIC SENTENCE-BLUE The first sentence in a body paragraph. This must have a subject or FOCUS and opinion (commentary) for the paragraph. It does the same thing for a body paragraph that thesis does for the whole essay. This is your claim that your concrete details and commentary will prove. Example: • Las Vegas is one of the most surreal cities in the world. (TS)

PRACTICE TIME!! TS OR NOT! Remember – Topic Sentences should not express an accepted fact or detail. 1. One time in fourth grade I received 3 As and 3 Bs. 2. Lennie, the main character in Of Mice and Men, has a good heart but makes fatal mistakes. 3. 97% of the American population likes ice cream.

PRACTICE TIME!! TS OR NOT! 4. Scout is the most sympathetic of all the main characters in To Kill a Mockingbird. 5. Point Loma High School is the best school in San Diego because it has the most dedicated teachers and spirited students. 6. Just last week, I went to Staples and bought a day planner and folder to keep track of my homework and other important commitments.

CD – Concrete Details-Red Specific details that support your topic sentence. Direct quotes or paraphrasing pieces of the text Facts and statistics Use the following TRANSITIONS • For instance, • For example, • As an example, • Additionally/ Furthermore For instance, the center of the city is full of different kinds of buildings including a two-thirds scale Eiffel Tower, a giant black glass pyramid, a scaled-down replica of the New York skyline, and a faux Medieval castle. (CD)

CM - Commentary-Green Your opinion or comment about something; Your personal insight Your analysis/your explanation of how your concrete detail supports you topic sentence/claim Not a concrete detail Use the following TRANSITIONS • This shows that… • This also shows that… • This is because…. • This is important because…. Use the following TRANSITIONS • One can assume… • It/one can postulate… • It/one can propose…. • This suggests…. • One can surmise… This is important because the whole place reminds me of a big amusement park like Disneyland with its different “lands. ” (CM) One can surmise that if each building was constructed in isolation without any consideration of the other buildings, then the appearances would be diverse. (CM)

PRACTICE TIME!! CD OR CM 1. Students start school in August. 2. That movie was a total waste of money and time. 3. Mrs. Smith is the principal. 4. Mrs. Ingram teaches Language Arts. 5. Sometimes, writing is difficult.

CS – Concluding Sentence-Blue The last sentence in a body paragraph. It is all commentary, does not repeat key words, and gives a finished feeling to the paragraph. Suggested TRANSITIONS • As a result… • As a result of…. • Clearly…. • Ultimately… • As one can see…. • Thus… As a result, Las Vegas is such a strange city, it is hard to believe it actually exists unless you actually go there and experience it for yourself. (CS)

Ratio for your writing: 1 part concrete detail (CD) and 2 parts commentary (CM) CD : CM 1: 2 For every concrete detail (CD), you should have 2 commentary (CM) statements.

EXAMPLE: Sentence 1: (TS) Reputation is the worst Taylor Swift album. (topic and opinion) Sentence 2: (CD) (Facts) For instance, According to forbes. com “Reputation sold 1. 2 million units in its first week of release, but took an additional 17 weeks to hit the 2 million milestone. That's longer than Swift's past three albums combined. ” Sentence 3: (CM) (opinion)This is shows that people did not buy Reputation as quickly as Swift’s previous albums. Sentence 4: (CM) (opinion) One can assume that people do not like the music on this album as much as they have liked Swift’s prior music. Sentence 5: (CM)(sums up paragraph) Clearly, Taylor Swift’s popularity as a pop artist is declining.

PRACTICE: Sentence 1: (TS) _______ is the best/ worst _____. (topic and opinion) Sentence 2: (CD) (Facts) For example, Sentence 3: (CM) (opinion)This is important because, Sentence 4: (CM) (opinion) This shows that, Sentence 5: (CS)(sums up paragraph) Clearly,