v align speed with structure quality and efficiency

深入解读：小心陷阱（续） v 例二 原文：保持速度与结构、质量、效益相统一 初译：align speed with structure, quality and efficiency （保持A与B、C、D相统一） 改译：maintain momentum while pursuing structural optimization, quality and efficiency at the same time （保持速度[A]与B、C、D相 统一） 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 4

深入解读：参考上下文 v例 原文：坚持“引进来”与“走出去”相结合，不断扩大 对内对外开放（第二部分第八小节标题） 初译：Striking a good balance between “Bringing In” and “Going Out” strategies, … 改译：Maintaining a balance between inbound and outbound investment, … 终译：Maintaining a two-way flow of inbound and outbound business activity, and opening Shanghai wider to the rest of the country and the world 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 5

深入解读：听话要听音（续） v修改 改译：Meanwhile, we must make strenuous efforts in marketing and branding with an eye to developing more proprietary core technologies and strong brands. 或者：to develop/formulate marketing and branding strategies; to acquire/build up marketing and branding capabilities 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 8

深入解读：听话要听音（续） v例二 原文：信息产品制造业要强化研发设计，进一步完善产 业链，加快发展集成电路、新型元器件、新一代移动 通信等重点产业。 或者：In the area of ICT products manufacturing, we stress the stronger capacities of research, development and design as well as improved industrial chain… 改译：… and build up competencies across the whole value chain. . . 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 9

深入解读：勤做背景调研（续） v 例二 原文：实施积极的就业政策，加大了政府扶持创业和就 业援助的力度，新增了大量就业岗位，一大批就业困 难群众重新走上了 作岗位。 初译：The government implemented active employment policies, intensifying efforts to support entrepreneurship and assist people in seeking jobs. Many new jobs were created to help a large number of people having difficulties in finding jobs get reemployed. 改译：Employment Assistance Program 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 12

准确表达：咬文嚼字（续） v例二：实词 –倡导全社会对老年人的尊敬和精神关爱 • to advocate respect and mental care for the elderly • to promote love and respect for the elderly –能源安全 • Safe energy supply • Energy security 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 15

准确表达：咬文嚼字（续） v例三：搭配 原文：……基本完成乡镇机构、农村义务教育和乡镇财 政管理体制等改革任务 …… 初译: … accomplish the reform of institutions, compulsory education system and the financial and taxation system at town and township level. (the reforms of A, B and C at 乡镇 level) 改译： … complete our reforms targeting town and township-level financial and taxation systems and institutions and the rural compulsory education system. (the reforms of [乡镇level] A 1 and A 2 and B) 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 16

准确表达：把握分寸 v 例一 原文：鼓励承接国际服务外包业务 初译：to participate proactively in outsourcing of international services 改译：to make strong inroads into the international services outsourcing market 建议: to encourage Chinese/local companies to seek more service business outsourced by international clients (the world’s office? ) 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 17

准确表达：把握分寸（续） v 例二 原文：畅通群众诉求渠道，引导群众通过理性合法形式 表达利益要求。 初译：More channels will be open to receive public complaints, so as to guide the public to voice their opinions in a rational and legal way. 改译：More channels will be opened for public to voice their interests and demands in a rational and lawful manner. 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 18

准确表达：运用术语 v 例一 原文：健全信息安全保障体系，加强信息安全关键技术 研发，确保基础通信网络和重要信息系统的安全。 初译：… and make sure of the safety of basic communication network and important information systems. 改译：… ensure the security of basic telecommunication networks and mission-critical information systems. 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 19

准确表达：受众意识 v例 原文：充分发挥三级医院在疑难杂症诊疗和教学、科研 方面的优势，加强医学重点学科建设，…… 初 译 ： We will leverage on hospitals at municipal, district and community levels … 改译：Capitalizing on the advantages of tier 3 hospitals 终译：Capitalizing on the strengths of top-level hospitals in diagnosing and treating difficult and complex cases as well as teaching and research, … 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 21

灵活变通 v 例一：口岸功能 – （对外贸易快速增长）上海口岸功能明显增强 • Shanghai considerably expanded its role as a trading port. – 2005年口岸进出口总额预计达到 3506亿美元 • Shanghai handled international trade shipments worth 350. 6 billion US dollars in 2005 – 我国首个“移动口岸”在深圳启用…… • （试译） Mobile immigration control office 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 23

灵活变通 v例二： “引进来”与“走出去” – “Bringing In” and “Going Out” strategies – Inbound and outbound investment – A two-way flow of inbound and outbound business activity 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 24

灵活变通 v 例三：信息化（续） –推动传统产业信息化改造，提高企业设计、生产、 管理的信息化水平。 • Traditional industries will be upgraded in a way that results in IT-based design, production and management. –充分运用信息技术促进现代服务业发展，着力推进 金融信息化、物流信息化 • IT will be fully utilized to propel the development of the modern service industry, including e-finance and elogistics. 上海市人民政府外事办公室翻译服务中心 26