TASK Write a description suggested by the picture

TASK: Write a description suggested by the picture (opening) q Begin with a simple sentence to introduce setting q Zoom in on red square and describe the soldier’s feelings: o Include a sentence that uses a comparative adjective to compare the role as a soldier to having a ‘normal’ job. Then use a superlative to emphasise this feeling o Use a so, so sentence, for example, ‘I’m so proud, so elated to be fighting for my country. ’ q Zoom out and use the senses to describe what can be heard and seen q Zoom in on yellow square and state who the letter is from and what has been said q In the distance… (change the mood and end on a cliffhanger)

TASK: Write a description suggested by the picture (opening) q Begin with a minor sentence reflecting the mood. q Describe what can be heard. q Use a so, so sentence, for example, ‘He was so frightened, so fatigued. ’ q Zoom into yellow square: o use dialogue. o describe what you can see o use figurative language to build imagery q Zoom out and zoom in on red square o Use language to show contrast between the two men embracing and the other soldier q Link your ending with your opening.

TASK: Write a description suggested by the picture (opening) q Double adjective start and introduce the setting q Use 3 of the senses to expand on the description of the setting q Zoom into red square: o Begin sentence with present participle verb and describe what can be seen o express the policeman’s thoughts and feelings. Use brackets although, e. g. ‘…(although he was on duty)…’ q Zoom out and use MAPSO technique to build imagery q Link your ending with your opening.

TASK: Write a description suggested by the picture q q Begin with triple noun colon and introduce the setting Use MAPSO techniques to expand on the description of the setting q Zoom into red square: o Begin with a simile to describe her actions o describe her feelings using emotive language o Use a rhetorical question q Zoom into blue square o use personification to describe the sky o Use 3 present participle verbs to describe the balloons q End with a inspiring quote about travelling

TASK: write a description suggested by the picture q Use a so, so sentence to start, e. g. ‘so beautiful, so tranquil…’ q Describe the colours of the setting q Use language to show contrast q Use 3 of the senses to build imagery q Zoom in (purple square): o use an adverb comma sentence to describe her movement o describe how she feels using emotive language q Zoom in on red square o In the distance…

Level 4 Compelling, Convincing A 05 Mark Upper Level 4 22 -24 marks Lower 19 -21 marks 3 Consistent, Clear 2 Some success • • Upper 16 -18 marks • Lower 13 -15 marks • Upper 10 -12 marks • Lower 7 -9 marks 1 Simple, limited A 05 • • • Convincing register and compelling for audience. Extensive and ambitious vocabulary and language devices Inventive use of structure Fluently linked paragraphs Consistently matched to suit audience and purpose Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary and language devices Coherent paragraphs and effective use of structural features Sustained attempted to match audience and purpose Conscious use of vocabulary Some language devices Some structure features Some use of paragraphs A 06 mark A 06 • 13 -16 • • 9 -12 • • 5 -8 • • Upper 4 -6 marks • Lower 1 -3 marks • • Simple awareness of audience and purpose Simple vocabulary and language devices Random paragraph structure 1 - 4 • • Sentence demarcation is consistently secure and accurate Wide range of punctuation and sentence forms for effect High level of accurate SPAG Extensive and ambitious vocabulary Sentence demarcation is mostly secure and accurate Range of punctuation and sentence forms for effect, mostly with success Generally accurate SPAG Increasingly ambitious vocabulary Sentence demarcation is mostly secure and sometimes accurate Some control of punctuation Attempts a variety of sentence forms Some accurate SPAG of complex words Varied vocabulary Occasional use of sentence demarcation Some evidence of conscious punctuation Simple range of sentence forms Simple use of vocabulary