Scholars English I Diagnostic 2013 14 DIAGNOSTIC FEEDBACK

Scholars English I Diagnostic - 2013 -14 DIAGNOSTIC FEEDBACK

Connection with Intellectual Standards (Critical Thinking Booklet), p. 8 and 10. clarity, precision, concision (e. g. $10 a word) vs. vagueness, wordiness

LAUDABLE ENDEAVORS “All of my friends judged and criticized me for choosing to join a few clubs at school. Even my parents objected once I have informed them about my decision. ”

LESS Laudable Endeavors “When you put attention to something, you can always do good and feel good about yourself. ”

Laudable Endeavors “Although some of my family members are generally supportive and positive, some of them are unknowingly offensive. ”

LESS Laudable Endeavors: Using texting language and more… “Well, im gonna go to a good college cause im good at math. ”

Laudable Endeavors “However, my dream was shattered not too long after revealing my fantasy to my mother about becoming an FBI agent. ”

LESS Laudable Endeavors “ Me and my brother went there and had an amazing time with all the stuff. ” (description of a cousin’s party)

2 handouts to hold on for the rest of your life 1. Correction Symbols 2. “Banned” words

Exemplary student work As you hear your peers read aloud their exemplary essays, think about and take notes on the following: 1) What makes this essay memorable and interesting? Be specific. 2) What’s this writer’s tool or “weapon” for making his/her writing come to life?