Sample Introduction and Body Paragraph SAMPLE INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH

Sample Introduction and Body Paragraph

SAMPLE INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH Maturing and aging are often confused to be the same thing. However, they are very different. Aging is simply a physical process that everyone goes through. Maturing, on the other hand, is learning how to make careful, thoughtful decisions. People who don’t mature run the risk of making terrible decisions that can ruin their lives as they get older. William Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet is an excellent example of what happens when decisions as made without maturity. The characters of Romeo and Juliet do not have the maturity to deal with the complications of their love and they end up dead as a result. This is evident in Romeo’s approach to love, Juliet’s relationship with her family and in the choices they make together. To understand this well, it’s best to start by examining these characters individually.

SAMPLE INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH Red: Preamble Underline: Thesis Blue: Ideas to be considered Green: Conclusion/Lead-in Maturing and aging are often confused to be the same thing. However, they are very different. Aging is simply a physical process that everyone goes through. Maturing, on the other hand, is learning how to make careful, thoughtful decisions. People who don’t mature run the risk of making terrible decisions that can ruin their lives as they get older. William Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet is an excellent example of what happens when decisions as made without maturity. The characters of Romeo and Juliet do not have the maturity to deal with the complications of their love and they end up dead as a result. This is evident in Romeo’s approach to love, Juliet’s relationship with her family and in the choices they make together. To understand this well, it’s best to start by examining these characters individually.

SAMPLE 1 st BODY PARAGRAPH Romeo’s immaturity is most visible in his approach to love. When he first appears, he is consumed by his love for Rosaline. He is heartbroken because they cannot be together, explaining to Benvolio, “She has forsworn to love, and in that vow/Do I live dead that live to tell it now” (Shakespeare I, I, 224 -225). His approach to dealing with this problem is to sulk instead of thoughtfully searching for a solution. A solution presents itself in the form of Juliet. The moment he sees her he is struck by her beauty and forgets about Rosaline. He kisses Juliet right away and tells her that he is in love with her, even though he knows almost nothing about her. A mature person would understand that love is more than simple attraction to another person and that he should take time to get to know her. Instead, he continues to make immature and dangerous decisions. In the following scene he risks his life by sneaking into the Capulet’s house to see Juliet. He shows no fear at being in his enemy’s house, telling Juliet, “With love’s light wings did I o’erperch these walls … Therefore they kinsmen are no let to me” (Shakespeare II, ii, 61 -65). He dismisses the dangers of her family and, in doing show, once again shows his immaturity. If he had considered her family’s influence, he would have acted more carefully instead of diving in and proposing marriage, a decision that sets them on their path to destruction. It’s clear from these early interactions that Romeo is very immature. However, he is not the only one who needs to grow up.

SAMPLE 1 st BODY PARAGRAPH Colour Divisions: (Red) Topic Sentence 2(Purple) 1 st Proof, example and connection to topic. (Orange) 2 nd Proof, example and connection to topic (Green) 3 rd Proof, example and connection to topic (Blue) Conclusion/Lead-in Romeo’s immaturity is most visible in his approach to love. When he first appears, he is consumed by his love for Rosaline. He is heartbroken because they cannot be together, explaining to Benvolio, “She has forsworn to love, and in that vow/Do I live dead that live to tell it now” (Shakespeare I, I, 224 -225). His approach to dealing with this problem is to sulk instead of thoughtfully searching for a solution. A solution presents itself in the form of Juliet. The moment he sees her he is struck by her beauty and forgets about Rosaline. He kisses Juliet right away and tells her that he is in love with her, even though he knows almost nothing about her. A mature person would understand that love is more than simple attraction to another person and that he should take time to get to know her. Instead, he continues to make immature and dangerous decisions. In the following scene he risks his life by sneaking into the Capulet’s house to see Juliet. He shows no fear at being in his enemy’s house, telling Juliet, “With love’s light wings did I o’erperch these walls … Therefore they kinsmen are no let to me” (Shakespeare II, ii, 61 -65). He dismisses the dangers of her family and, in doing show, once again shows his immaturity. If he had considered her family’s influence, he would have acted more carefully instead of diving in and proposing marriage, a decision that sets them on their path to destruction. It’s clear from these early interactions that Romeo is very immature. However, he is not the only one who needs to grow up.