Revising your transformation essay WRITING CONCISELY Pronouns You
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Revising your transformation essay WRITING CONCISELY
Pronouns You must make clear the meaning of the pronoun before using it the first time. She went to the store and then to the game. Who Liz It is she? went to the store and then to the game. changed the way Melinda felt about her ex-friends. What is it?
Editing Sentences Example sentence: In this paragraph is a demonstration of the use of good style in writing a report. What Why is wrong with this sentence? is it wrong? What can you do to change it?
Eliminating wordy sentences In this paragraph is a demonstration of the use of good style in writing a report. Revision: This paragraph demonstrates good style in report writing.
Example The point I wish to make is that the employees working at this company are in need of a much better manager of their money. Come to board and rewrite this sentence.
Example After reviewing the results of your previous research, and in light of the relevant information found within the context of the study, there is ample evidence for making important, significant changes to our operating procedures.
Essay Revision Pull out your transformation essay and a separate sheet of paper. Go through your essay and review your sentences for concision. Use the same method we used for the example sentences. Rewrite the sentences on a separate sheet of paper. You will turn in the separate sheet of paper along with a
