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Evidence-Based Answers in “The Monkey’s Paw” Reading between the lines and seeing what the author was saying underneath the surface Going out on a limb and making a claim that someone else might disagree with “This shows” “This demonstrates” “This highlights” “This proves”

Student Exemplars “Better let it burn. ” – Sergeant Major Even though the paw seems that it will give you fortune, when you wish on it, it will resort in something bad. You have to be careful with your wording because the monkey’s paw will turn out sort of like the opposite of what you think. Since the Sergeant Major knows that this is powerful and can cause great fortune to people. It does something that has never happened before. This shows that he understood the power of the paw and that it is magical. Sergeant Major has experienced the monkey’s paw and knows that it will bring great distress. He does not want the Whites to go through what he did. When Sergeant Major said, “don’t blame me for what happens, ” this shows that the paw can be bad and usually causes distress. Kennedy Ross, pd. 6/7

Student Exemplars “Better let it burn. ” – Sergeant Major Kennedy pushes her analyses further than Even though the paw seems that it will give Here, you fortune, when you wish on just summarizing the scene. She includes it, it will resort in something bad. You have to be careful with your wording summarizing sentences so that the reader can and contextualize the scene, but she because the monkey’s paw will turn out sortunderstand of like the opposite of what adds the extra sentences with the phrase “this shows”this to demonstrate a deeper understanding. you think. Since the Sergeant Major knows that is powerful and can cause great fortune to people. It does something that has never happened before. This shows that he understood the power of the paw and that it is magical. Sergeant Major has experienced the monkey’s paw and knows that it will bring great distress. He does not want the Whites to go through what he did. When Sergeant Major said, “don’t blame me for what happens, ” this shows that the paw can be bad and usually causes distress. Kennedy Ross, pd. 6/7

Student Exemplars “Better let it burn. ” – Sergeant Major Some things deserve to be taken away from the world permanently. For example, that is what the Sergeant Major thinks should be done to the monkey’s paw because of all of the horrible things that happen around it. He thinks that it should be gone so that it can’t hurt anyone anymore. I think though when he says, “Better let it burn, ” he wants it gone completely not buried to be dug up again but gone permanently so every last atom is gone. Also for it to get burned by the flames of destruction like it has done the same to so many others. Lilianne Braden, pd. 6/7

Student Exemplars “Better let it burn. ” – Sergeant Major Here, Lilianne analyses the text on a much deeper level than just summarizing. She answers the all-important literature question of “Why Some things to be away this word and not that deserve word? ” By picking the taken word “burn” out offrom the text the world permanently. For and saying why Jacobs and not or “crumple up, ” she thinks should be done to the example, thatsaidisburn what the“bury” Sergeant Major shows the intensity with which the Sergeant Major believes in the monkey’s pawpaw. because of all of the horrible things that happen around it. danger of the monkey’s He thinks that it should be gone so that it can’t hurt anyone anymore. I think though when he says, “Better let it burn, ” he wants it gone completely not buried to be dug up again but gone permanently so every last atom is gone. Also for it to get burned by the flames of destruction like it has done the same to so many others. Lilianne Braden, pd. 6/7

Student Exemplars “Better let it burn. ” – Sergeant Major When Sergeant Major says, “better let it burn, ” it means that the Sergeant knows what might happen to the family. For an example the person who had it before made 2 wishes and it turned out bad so for his last wish, he asked for his death. This means that the paw could cause many bad things to the next person who uses it. Therefore he doesn’t want that to happen so he would rather brun it and get rid of it so it brings no more harm. Jenny Acuna, pd. 6/7

Student Exemplars Here, Jenny uses a great tool to prove a point: citing an example! “Better let. Yes, it burn. ” Sergeant Major her first –quote was analyzing why the Sergeant Major said, “better let it burn, ” but she backs THAT quote up with another quote! More quotes is always better than fewer quotes. When Sergeant Major says, “better let it burn, ” it means that the Sergeant knows what might happen to the family. For an example the person who had it before made 2 wishes and it turned out bad so for his last wish, he asked for his death. This means that the paw could cause many bad things to the next person who uses it. Therefore he doesn’t want that to happen so he would rather brun it and get rid of it so it brings no more harm. Jenny Acuna, pd. 6/7

Student Exemplars Mr. White’s “horrible fear” On the bottom of page 5 in “The Monkey’s Paw, ” Mr. White experiences a “horrible fear. ” This fear is that their son is going to be a horrible, mutilated thing and not his son. This demonstrates that Mr. White is more realistically thinking about what the monkey’s paw does and that what’s at the door can not possible be what he knows is his son. Matt Bevacqua, pd. 2/3

Student Exemplars Matt does an excellent job here at digging deeper into the text. Insteadfear” of just Mr. White’s “horrible summarizing what Mr. White means and why he says that, he describes what it reveals about his personality. He calls Mr. White “more realistic” than Mrs. White, which is a great way of looking at the couple during the last scene. On the bottom of page 5 in “The Monkey’s Paw, ” Mr. White experiences a “horrible fear. ” This fear is that their son is going to be a horrible, mutilated thing and not his son. This demonstrates that Mr. White is more realistically thinking about what the monkey’s paw does and that what’s at the door can not possible be what he knows is his son. Matt Bevacqua, pd. 2/3

Student Exemplars “Don’t let it in!” – Mr. White This is where Mrs. White wants to let Herbert in but Mr. White doesn’t want to let Herbert in. Mr. White says, “don’t let in. ” because now instead of being Mr. and Mrs. White’s son, he is a creative not a human. In the story Mr. White could only recognize Herbert by his clothes and not his body. Mrs. White’s response was, “You’re afraid of your own son. ” He was afraid of his son because his son was a monster. Matt Erni, pd. 8/9

Student Exemplars What Matt does well here is that he contextualizes the scene for us by summarizing the scene. But he doesn’t end there! He pushes it further by “Don’t let it in!” – Mr. White clarifying that Mr. White was afraid of his son because it was no longer his son. That’s the point Jacobs wants us to take away from this text. This is where Mrs. White wants to let Herbert in but Mr. White doesn’t want to let Herbert in. Mr. White says, “don’t let in. ” because now instead of being Mr. and Mrs. White’s son, he is a creature not a human. In the story Mr. White could only recognize Herbert by his clothes and not his body. Mrs. White’s response was, “You’re afraid of your own son. ” He was afraid of his son because his son was a monster. Matt Erni, pd. 8/9

Student Exemplars “Don’t let it in!” – Mr. White The author uses two different perspectives during this scene when Mr. White and Mrs. White wish for Herbert back. This demonstrates how both Mr. and Mrs. White feel about making the wish for Herbert to come back. Mr. White is refusing to let Mrs. White open the door for, who she thinks is Herbert, because of how Herbert will look. The author uses the word “it” instead of “him” referring to Herbert because Mr. White knows the person knocking won’t be Herbert, the same as before. Lily Smith, pd. 2/3

Student Exemplars “Don’t let it in!” – Mr. White The author uses two different perspectives during this scene when Mr. White and Mrs. White wish for Herbert back. This demonstrates how both Mr. and Mrs. White feel about making What Lily does well here is she pullsto thecome author inback. Mr. White is refusing to let the wish for Herbert and examines his purpose in writing things a Mrs. way. White open doorauthor for, who she thinks is Herbert, certain By showing that itthe is a specific who made DECISIONS in the text, Lily because of how Herbert will look. The author uses the word “it” demonstrates a deeper understanding of the writing processof and“him” literaturereferring as a whole. to Herbert because Mr. White knows instead the person knocking won’t be Herbert, the same as before. Lily Smith, pd. 2/3

Student Exemplars “Don’t let it in!” – Mr. White tells Mrs. White, “Don’t let it in!” Mrs. White’s response was, “You’re afraid of your own son. ” This shows how Mr. White said “it” instead of “him” because he knew his son was no longer the same person. Mrs. White wanted to let him in because she had no idea what he was like, unlike Mr. White who saw him headless and could only identify him because of his clothes. Mr. White was certain there was going to be something wrong with his son. Katia Castano, pd. 8/9

Student Exemplars Katia is VERY clear about the difference between “it” and “him” and how Jacobs “Don’ttolet it in!” Mr. White intended show that–Mr. no longer felt that it would be his son at the door. She, like Lilianne, answers the question, “Why this word and not that word? ” Mr. White tells Mrs. White, “Don’t let it in!” Mrs. White’s response was, “You’re afraid of your own son. ” This shows how Mr. White said “it” instead of “him” because he knew his son was no longer the same person. Mrs. White wanted to let him in because she had no idea what he was like, unlike Mr. White who saw him headless and could only identify him because of his clothes. Mr. White was certain there was going to be something wrong with his son. Katia Castano, pd. 8/9

Student Exemplars “Don’t let it in!” – Mr. White In the sentence, Jacobs’ use of the word “it” shows that his son is now an it. “It” means something that is not a boy or a girl. So this scene reveals that, although is son is back alive, he thinks it’s not really his son. Mrs. White’s response is, “you’re afraid of your own. ” This shows that Mrs. White still thinks it’s her son. Justin Oakes, pd. 8/9

Student Exemplars Justin’s answer is awesome. Not only does he break down Jacob’s use of the word “it, ” but “Don’t let it 4 in!” – Mr. he also uses phrases from. White our textdependent list of acceptable words. It really demonstrates his understanding of the text and his ability to analyze it on a deeper level. In the sentence, Jacobs’ use of the word “it” shows that his son is now an it. “It” means something that is not a boy or a girl. So this scene reveals that, although is son is back alive, he thinks it’s not really his son. Mrs. White’s response is, “you’re afraid of your own. ” This shows that Mrs. White still thinks it’s her son. Justin Oakes, pd. 8/9

Editing Together “Mrs. White at the same moment placed her hands behind her, and hurriedly unfastening the strings of her apron, put that useful article of apparel beneath the cushion of her chair. ” This shows that Ms. White saw the man in the window trying to figure out whether to knock or not, so she just hurried to see what was wrong. How can we make this text-dependent answer a little more analytical and a little less summary? Show in 2/3 & 6/7

Editing Together “Mrs. White at the same moment placed her hands behind her, and hurriedly unfastening the strings of her apron, put that useful article of apparel beneath the cushion of her chair. ” Mrs. White hurried to the door because she thought it had to do with the money so she wanted to go as fast as possible to get it. This shows that Mrs. White is greedy for the money that she gets but not the way she wants it. How can we push this analysis further? Why did Jacobs want us to see her run to the door, and how does it affect the outcome when we find out what happened to Herbert? Show in 2/3 & 6/7

Editing Together What is the “horrible fear” that Mr. White experiences on the bottom of page 5? The horrible fear is his mutilated son. I would be scared too if this happened to me because he would be all smashed and mashed. Try to contextualize the scene for us, meaning put a sentence or two before the quote to let us know where it is in the short story. And while we’re at it, let’s think of a more sophisticated way to say “smashed and mashed. ” Show in 8/9

Editing Together What is the “horrible fear” that Mr. White experiences on the bottom of page 5? His fear is seeing how his son will look like also since he can’t see where he is going. This shows that he regrets making that wish also that his two fears are coming into one. Let’s give this quote some context like we did in the previous one and also work on elaborating a bit. “Seeing how his son will look” is a good start, but why is he afraid of that? What else in the story hints at what the son will look like now? Show in 8/9