Replacing Dead Words Identify the dead words in
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Replacing Dead Words Identify the “dead words” in the following paragraph. “Hey Mike, I just heard something really interesting, said Kate. “Jennie thinks you are nice and cute too. ” Mike was happy when he heard this. He dropped his stuff and looked happily at Kate. Then he began to move around in an excited way. He went down the hallway fast and said, “Wow. ” He accidently ran into the principal in the doorway. The principal was unhappy and told Mike to calm down. Mike said he was sorry and moved away from Mr. Johnson. Then he turned and walked sadly back to Kate, and she said, “Let’s go find Jennie. ”
Rewrite the paragraph replacing the DEAD WORDS. “Hey Mike, I just heard something really interesting, said Kate. “Jennie thinks you are nice and cute too. ” Mike was happy when he heard this. He dropped his stuff and looked happily at Kate. Then he began to move around in an excited way. He went down the hallway fast and said, “Wow. ” He accidently ran into the principal in the doorway. The principal was unhappy and told Mike to calm down. Mike said he was sorry and moved away from Mr. Johnson. Then he turned and walked sadly back to Kate, and she said, “Let’s go find Jennie. ”
DEAD WORDS awesome cool going to very mad sad got/get nice a lot/lots fun good great happy funny beautiful big walk run jog stuff things awful
Thesaurus Time �On your tombstone handout, make a list of at least five synonyms for each of the DEAD WORDS you have chosen. �Be ready to share in 15 minutes!
Revising your work �Now, locate the DEAD WORDS in your draft. �Replace those words with more descriptive LIVE WORDS.
