Problems in Writing A Quick Review by Mrs

Problems in Writing A Quick Review by Mrs. Kiester I should give him green eyes…. EDITING OR REVISING ? Editor r Cat e i h t e i lik

A Complete Sentence • Must have a subject and a verb • Must express a complete thought • Must contain the correct punctuation Subject + Verb = Complete Thought= Complete Sentence

* Do NOT form a complete thought– * CANNOT stand alone- t e h t nd A Afte ra ver y in s g o le d t t i l wo d. r a y the But, not after da lon gd rk. ay a Becaus t th e of e the sn fice . ow kep t falling.

Run-ons (R. O. ) • A run-on contains two independent clauses combined without proper punctuation (or two sentences in one). Example (comma splice/connected) The sun was peeking over the horizon, the new day was dawning. Corrected: The sun was peeking over the horizon; the new day was dawning. Corrected: The sun was peeking over the horizon as the new day was dawning.

Parallel Structure • With the –ing verb (gerund) of words: Parallel: Mary likes hiking, swimming, and bicycling. NOT: Mary likes hiking, swimming, and to bike. • With infinitive (to + verb) phrases: to run to jump

Parallel Structure Continued • Not Parallel: The production manager wrote precise reports and turns them in on time. • Parallel: The production manager wrote precise reports that he turned in on time. • Parallel: The production manager wrote precise reports and turned them in on time.

Misplaced Modifier (M. M. ) • Adverbs, adjectives, clauses, and phrases that are in the wrong place Example On her way home, Jan found a gold man’s watch. The man was gold? ! Corrected: On her way home, Jan found a man’s gold watch.

Effective Topic Sentence (T. S. ) • Does it stick to a main idea? • Do the rest of the sentences in the paragraph support or refer back to it? • Does it start with a capital letter and end with the correct punctuation mark? 1) Topic Sentence (claim) 2) Supporting Detail #1 3) Supporting Detail #2 4) Supporting Detail #3 5) Conclusion

Paragraph Assignment (Groups of 3 - 20 Minutes) • You will write a paragraph based on the graphic you choose. You must create a visual graphic and write each sentence on the components. • You must use a simile and prove it throughout the paragraph. TOPIC • Show Examples SENTENCE Other Graphic Examples pizza, house, ladybugs, phones, pretty much anything with parts Use Transition Words Actual sentence here S. D. al Actu ten n e s ce conclusion . S. D. Actual sentence