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MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Why is the second example more effective than the first? American colonists played the British game of rounders. They played it in New England. They played it in the 1700 s. In the 1700 s, American colonists in New England played the British game of rounders. i Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence When you combine short, related sentences and sentence parts into single sentences, your writing will • flow more smoothly • clearly show relationships among ideas • be more interesting to read Next EXIT

MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use the following sentence combining strategies as you revise. Click on the strategy you want to explore. MENU • Combine whole sentences • Combine sentence parts • Insert words or phrases • Use an appositive phrase • Combine with who, which, and that EXIT

MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. l They tire fairly quickly. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. but they tire fairly The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. , They quickly. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Notice how combining the sentences makes the relationship between the ideas clearer. but they tire fairly The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. , They quickly. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way. He had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd. He cheered me on so everyone could hear. Click to see the answer

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way. He had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd. He cheered me on so everyone could hear. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences ORIGINAL My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way. He had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd. He cheered me on so everyone could hear. REVISED My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way, but he had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd, and he cheered me on so everyone could hear. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Use subordinating conjunctions like these to combine two sentences whose ideas are not equally important. The less important sentence then becomes a subordinate clause. when since although after because though before as if unless until so that if while provided whether Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences How might these two sentences be combined using a subordinating conjunction? Mia refused to give up her place in line. She knew she might never get another chance to hear the band. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences This revision combines the two sentences, making the less important idea the subordinate clause. ORIGINAL Mia refused to give up her place in line. She knew she might never get another chance to hear the band. REVISED Mia refused to give up her place in line because she knew she might never get another chance to hear the band. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences How would you combine these sentences using subordinating conjunctions? I practiced soccer everyday. I wanted to make the team. The next tryout went so well. It surprised even me. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Whole Sentences Notice how much more smoothly the revised sentences flow. Also notice that the relationships between ideas are now clearer. ORIGINAL I practiced soccer everyday. I wanted to make the team. The next tryout went so well. It surprised even me. REVISED I practiced soccer everyday because I wanted to make the team. The next tryout went so well that it surprised even me. Menu

MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Sentence Parts Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Sentence Parts Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. How can these sentences be combined by creating a compound subject? My dog always barks at the mail carrier. Our neighbor’s dog always barks at her too. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Sentence Parts Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. Because the both dogs are performing the same action, these sentences can easily be combined. ORIGINAL My dog always barks at the mail carrier. Our neighbor’s dog always barks at her too. REVISED My dog and our neighbor’s dog always bark at the mail carrier. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Sentence Parts Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Akiko rode her bike to the park. Ethan rode his bike to the park too. They decided to ride together to Lori’s house. They got caught in the rain on the way. Click to see the answer

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Sentence Parts Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Akiko rode her bike to the park. Ethan rode his bike to the park too. They decided to ride together to Lori’s house. They got caught in the rain on the way. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine Sentence Parts Combining similar subjects and predicates with coordinating conjunctions gives the paragraph a better flow and makes it more interesting to read. Akiko and Ethan rode their bikes to the park. They decided to ride together to Lori’s house but got caught in the rain on the way. Menu

MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. How could these two sentences be combined? I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. How could these two sentences be combined? I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates. MENU EXIT

PREVIOUS Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates. MENU EXIT

PREVIOUS Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates. MENU EXIT

PREVIOUS Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a book. about pirates. spell-binding book MENU EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a bo spell-binding book about pirates. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a spell-binding book about pirates. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases In this example, what words could be inserted from one sentence into the other? The most popular national park in the United States is in Tennessee and North Carolina. It is Great Smoky Mountains National Park. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases The new sentence is now concise and direct. ORIGINAL The most popular national park in the United States is in Tennessee and North Carolina. It is Great Smoky Mountains National Park. REVISED The most popular national park in the United States is Great Smoky Mountains National Park in Tennessee and North Carolina. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled. Click to see the word that must change form

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled. solution was clever. The EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Katya sang into the microphone. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Katya sang into the microphone. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Smiling, Katya sang into the microphone. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Smiling, Katya sang into the microphone. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases What word in these sentences could change form in order to combine the two sentences? The hungry dog ran toward the heaping bowl of food. He was eager. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases Adding -ly to eager turns it into an adverb which can be used to describe how the dog ran. ORIGINAL The hungry dog ran toward the heaping bowl of food. He was eager. REVISED The hungry dog ran eagerly toward the heaping bowl of food. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? My neighbor was knocking at my door. He was knocking loudly and angrily. Click to see the phrase

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? My neighbor was knocking at my door. He was knocking loudly and angrily. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. ORIGINAL My neighbor was knocking at my door. He was knocking loudly and angrily. REVISED My neighbor was knocking loudly and angrily at my door. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours. Click to see the phrase

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours. EXIT

PREVIOUS Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases The snow fell thickly over the whole valley MENU EXIT

PREVIOUS Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases The snow fell thickly over the whole valley for several hours. MENU EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Insert Words or Phrases The snow fell thickly over the whole valley for several hours. Menu

MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? Olivia E. Coolidge, an English author, wrote about Greek myths. Click to see the appositive phrase

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? Olivia E. Coolidge, an English author, wrote about Greek myths. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. Click to see the sentence

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. . The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains, the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky form the Continental Divide. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains, the largest mountain system in North America. The Rform the Continental Divide. EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Use an Appositive Phrase When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains, the largest mountain system in North America, form the Continental Divide. Menu

MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine with Who, Which and That A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Continue…

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine with Who, Which and That A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator. The machine helps patients breathe. Click to see the answer

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine with Who, Which and That A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator. The machine helps patients breathe. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine with Who, Which and That A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. ORIGINAL Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator. The machine helps patients breathe. REVISED Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator that helps patients breathe. Next EXIT

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine with Who, Which and That Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that? Rachel Carson was a gifted writer. She worked for the U. S. Fish and Wildlife Service. In 1962, she wrote a book called Silent Spring. It helped create the environmental movement. This movement remains powerful today. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine with Who, Which and That Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that? Rachel Carson was a gifted writer. She worked for the U. S. Fish and Wildlife Service. In 1962, she wrote a book called Silent Spring. It helped create the environmental movement. This movement remains powerful today. Click to see a revision

PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness. Combining Sentence Combine with Who, Which and That Turning these phrases into clauses makes this paragraph less repetitive and more concise. Rachel Carson, who worked for the U. S. Fish and Wildlife Service, was a gifted writer. In 1961, she wrote a book called Silent Spring, which helped create the environmental movement that remains powerful today. Menu