MENU EXIT Tired Language Wordiness Tired language is
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MENU EXIT Tired Language Wordiness Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous. Can you spot the tired language in the following sentence? The mountain bike cost an arm and a leg. Click to see the tired language
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous. Can you spot the tired language in the following sentence? The mountain bike cost an arm and a leg. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous. How could you revise this sentence using more vivid language? The mountain bike cost an arm and a leg. Click to see a revision
PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness Tired Language Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous. ORIGINAL The mountain bike cost an arm and a leg. REVISED The mountain bike cost as much as I earn babysitting in a year. Next EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Which word is an example of tired language in this sentence? The museum’s exhibit on mummies was great. Click to see the tired language
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Which word is an example of tired language in this sentence? The museum’s exhibit on mummies was great. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language How could you revise this sentence to get rid of the tired word? The museum’s exhibit on mummies was great. Click to see a revision
PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness Tired Language ORIGINAL The museum’s exhibit on mummies was great. REVISED The museum’s exhibit on mummies was fascinating and informative. Next EXIT
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Use the following strategies to revise tired language. Click on the strategy you want to explore. MENU • Replace Clichés • Use Precise Nouns • Find Vivid Verbs • Replace Empty Modifiers EXIT
MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Clichés A cliché is an overused, worn-out expression. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Clichés A cliché is an overused, worn-out expression. Here are examples of some familiar clichés. You have probably heard these expressions before. • • easy as pie stubborn as a mule raining cats and dogs grinning ear to ear Next EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Clichés Use these strategies to avoid clichés: • Find a fresh image for what you want to say. • Connect with feeling. For example, how does boredom feel? Is it endless, dull, weary? • Use ordinary language. If you can't think of a fresh image, then choose clear, everyday words instead of a worn-out expression. Next EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Clichés What is the cliché in this sentence? Paul thought the history exam was a piece of cake. Click to see the cliché
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Clichés What is the cliché in this sentence? Paul thought the history exam was a piece of cake. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Clichés How could you avoid the cliché in this sentence? Paul thought the history exam was a piece of cake. Click to see a revision
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Clichés The revised sentence describes Paul’s actions. These details show rather than tell how easy the exam was. ORIGINAL Paul thought the history exam was a piece of cake. REVISED Paul moved his pencil quickly and confidently as he answered the questions. Menu
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Use Precise Nouns Use nouns that give specific information. Replace common nouns with the names of specific places, people, or things. Common Noun Specific Noun ocean Atlantic Ocean bag purse, backpack store grocery store, pharmacy lunch pizza, turkey sandwich EXIT
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Use Precise Nouns Use nouns that give specific information. Replace common nouns with the names of specific places, people, or things. Common Noun Specific Noun ocean Atlantic Ocean bag purse, backpack store grocery store, pharmacy lunch pizza, turkey sandwich Next EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Use Precise Nouns What are the non-specific nouns in this sentence? She put her bag in her car and drove to the store. Click to see the non-specific nouns
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Use Precise Nouns What are the non-specific nouns in this sentence? She put her bag in her car and drove to the store. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Use Precise Nouns How would you revise this sentence to use precise nouns? She put her bag in her car and drove to the store. Click to see a revision
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Use Precise Nouns How would you revise this sentence to use precise nouns? ORIGINAL She put her bag in her car and drove to the store. REVISED She put her frayed backpack in her rusty station wagon and drove to the Shop ‘n Save. Menu
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Find Vivid Verbs Use verbs that convey a true sense of the action you want to describe. Generic Verb Specific Verb eat gobble, chop, munch yell screech, holler, shriek sleep snooze, doze, slumber talk chatter, discuss, lecture EXIT
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Find Vivid Verbs Use verbs that convey a true sense of the action you want to describe. Generic Verb Specific Verb eat gobble, chop, munch yell screech, holler, shriek sleep snooze, doze, slumber talk chatter, discuss, lecture Next EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Find Vivid Verbs What are the generic verbs in this sentence? Tyler took off his coat, put it into his locker, and closed the door. Click to see the generic verbs
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Find Vivid Verbs What are the generic verbs in this sentence? Tyler took off his coat, put it into his locker, and closed the door. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Find Vivid Verbs What specific verbs could you use in this sentence instead of the generic verbs? Tyler took off his coat, put it into his locker, and closed the door. Click to see a revision
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Find Vivid Verbs What specific verbs could you use in this sentence instead of the generic verbs? ORIGINAL Tyler took off his coat, put it into his locker, and closed the door. REVISED Tyler slipped off his coat, tossed it into his locker, and flung the door shut. Menu
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers (adjectives and adverbs) can have many shades of meaning. Choose modifiers that convey exactly what you mean. You may also need to add details to make your meaning clear. Generic Modifier Specific Modifier dull tedious, dreary, boring, lifeless appetizing, delicious, mouthwatering joyous, cheerful, pleased, content sore, throbbing, excruciating, aching tasty happy painful EXIT
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers (adjectives and adverbs) can have many shades of meaning. Choose modifiers that convey exactly what you mean. You may also need to add details to make your meaning clear. Generic Modifier Specific Modifier dull tedious, dreary, boring, lifeless appetizing, delicious, mouthwatering joyous, cheerful, pleased, content sore, throbbing, excruciating, aching tasty happy painful Next EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers What are the empty modifiers in this sentence? The store’s bad service made me mad. Click to see the empty modifiers
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers What are the empty modifiers in this sentence? The store’s bad service made me mad. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers What more specific modifiers could you use in this sentence? The store’s bad service made me mad. Click to see a revision
PREVIOUS MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers What more specific modifiers could you use in this sentence? ORIGINAL The store’s bad service made me mad. REVISED The store’s rude employees, long lines, and empty shelves annoyed me. Next EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers What is the empty modifier in this sentence? The flowers in the bouquet were colorful. Click to see the empty modifier
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers What is the empty modifier in this sentence? The flowers in the bouquet were colorful. Continue…
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers How could you revise this sentence to make it less tired and more descriptive? The flowers in the bouquet were colorful. Click to see a revision
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers How could you revise this sentence to make it less tired and more descriptive? The flowers in the bouquet were colorful. EXIT
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers The flowers in the bouquet were colorful. EXIT
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers The flowers in the bouquet were EXIT
MENU Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers The flowers in the bouquet were a vivid combination of brilliant orange, bold red, and sunny yellow. EXIT
PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Tired Language Replace Empty Modifiers The flowers in the bouquet were a vivid combination of brilliant orange, bold red, and sunny yellow. Menu
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