Medea Timed Writing Improvements Strengths as a whole

Medea Timed Writing Improvements

Strengths as a whole Specificity in detailing cruelty Weaknesses Thin introductions Thesis statement did not cover title, author, ALL aspects of the prompt, and MOWAW Organization- intro, paragraphing for Medea/Jason, or cruelty/function MOWAW not addressed Time Management- spend 30 -40 minutes writingnot planning

Thin introduction #1 The act of cruelty, rather it be extreme or non-violent, is an act that most would be ashamed of. In the famous work of literature “Medea”, cruelty is a major theme. The levels of cruelty shown range widely. The characters commit cruel acts as well as display cruelty with their harsh words. The response to being treated unfairly reveals a lot about a character. The fate of all is revealed as cruelty plays out through the work. ***Language issues, MOWAW not addressed, vague and lacks clear focus. (Probably a 4, though the writer might get to a 5)

Stronger Introduction #2 Cruelty is almost always demonized in modern society, and rightfully so. In Euripides’ Medea, the titular character uses cruelty as a means to show off mental superiority towards others. While being a brutish way to do so, cruelty is an effective way to display strength over another person. ***MOWAW is better articulated here; still requires sharper focus (more indicative of the 5, 6 essay)

Strong Introduction #3 Cruelty is a tool that has been used throughout history to extract a response, whether information or an emotion in the victim or perpetrator. Literacy, such as Euripides’ Medea, illustrates cruelty as it is typically used. The titular character of Euripides’ wide-renowned tragedy uses cruelty in order to replicate her feelings of betrayal in her recently- remarried husband Jason. The cruelty exacted upon Jason in retaliation for his wrongdoings against her reveals the depth of pain Medea is experiencing. Medea uses cruelty to exact revenge on Jason, revealing her melodramatic and quite violent nature, as well as expressing emotions one might feel if his or her entire world had been uprooted by a backstabbing spouse. ***more development here; clearer focus; leading to a 6/7 essay

Strong Introduction #4 Cruelty is one of the central themes in Medea. Both Jason and Medea unleash shocking acts of cruelty in each other. Jason completely abandons Medea in Corinth without a second thought, leaving her to fend for herself in a society that severely limits foreigners and women, of which she is both. Medea commits the heinous crime of killing her children as revenge. Ultimately, Medea show cruelty and cruel revenge can render those who commit them unsympathetic and even monstrous. ***MOWAW is articulated. Developed and focused idea—leading to a 7/8 Notice how the language of this intro is more academic

AP Thesis. . . … is looking to see that you can demonstrate : a thoughtful analysis of the prompt and the passage, : organized and articulate writing with literary sensibility. Diction and sophisticated use of language matters. Thesis is the title, author, prompt, and MOWAW- THE ENTIRE FOCUS OF THE ESSAY IN ONE SENTENCE.

AP READERS Want to see --the components of the prompt, --a framed argument, --proven with textual evidence.

Scratch the Surface Introduction Mark Twain’s The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn is a book about a boy rafting down the Mississippi River with Jim, an escaped slave. Mark Twain’s The Adventure’s of Huckleberry Finn shows one person’s ethical stand against the hypocritical practices of Antebellum Southern society. We must dig deeper! Make an observation about life, humanity, the issue in the prompt.

Dig Deeper. . . Through Creon’s tragic downfall in Antigone, Sophocles denounces Wording can make an idea even more sophisticated. humanity. Use a complex sentence to communicate complex thought. Use a subordinate clause and an independent clause! Lacks context Lacks rationale on humanity- what about it?

This is it Although Huckleberry may not realize it, the Mississippi River serves as a symbol of freedom between the lands of chaos, hypocrisy, and destruction in Mark Twain’s The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn. Although the escalation of violence in John Steinbeck’s Of Mice and Men eventually results in two deaths, it is through violence that compassion is revealed when George, in a violent but merciful act, saves his friend Lenny from cruel mob justice. Title, author, prompt, and MOWAW- a position or judgment about the subject/topic/theme/issue. How is meaning made?

Topic, Position, Rationale In William Shakespeare’s The. Taming of the Shrew, Petruchio, because of his ability to use language with precision, is far more successful at manipulating people than Lucentio, suggesting that language, not money or social status, is the true source of power and influence. Title, author, prompt, and MOWAW a position or judgment about the subject/topic/theme/ issue.

Examine YOUR Medea intro Examine your intro Rewrite your intro! Highlight your thesis. Take 10 minutes to rewrite your intro using feedback from your paper and today’s discussion. Do you have an intro that leads into the prompt’s issue (thematic idea)? Does your thesis cover title, author, prompt position, and MOWAW? Rewrite the intro and staple it to the front of your essay. This is turned in to me today.

Pointers for A Doll House Timed Writing What is the prompt asking? Addressing ALL aspects of prompt Analyze MOWAW beyond text- this is the complexity of the argument