Lesson 36 Evaluating an Exemplar Third Body Paragraph

Lesson 36 Evaluating an Exemplar Third Body Paragraph for the RST 1

Evaluating an Exemplar Third Body Paragraph We will look at the exemplar third body paragraph and pick out the strengths of the paragraph. Notice that some words or phrases represent more than one strength. 2

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 3

Here’s the strength. First sentence The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are is Indented. depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 4

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 5

Here’s the strength. States a Claim about The video, The New Deal, showed Source 3. Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 6

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 7

Here’s the strength. An Example that helps The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans prove the claim. being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 8

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the depicted building roads. workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 9

Here’s the strength. A Quote that supports The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are the example. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the depicted building roads. workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 10

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. reach his market. ” 11

Here’s the strength. An Explanation of the The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are Quote. depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. reach his market. ” 12

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 13

Here’s the strength. Uses Explanation The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s Words. plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 14

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 15

Here’s the strength. Uses Appropriate The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans Transitions. being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 16

What strength do you see highlighted here? The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 17

Here’s the strength. Uses Parallel Structure. The video, The New Deal, showed Roosevelt’s plans being implemented. For example, thousands of workers are depicted building roads. The narrator of the video explains that because of these roads, the “farmer finds it possible to reach his market. ” Clearly, the roads created jobs for the workers, the roads made farmers more profitable, and the bigger profits created jobs in other sectors. 18

Notice This paragraph hit a triple. The triple is always: 1. Example 2. Quote 3. Explanation Here they are again separated so you can see them easily. 19

Time to Revise Your Writing Now that you have evaluated an exemplar third body paragraph, use what you have learned to revise the paragraph that you wrote. Do not copy the exemplar paragraph but use it as a guide to make your paragraph better. Show your revisions by crossing out words, phrases, and sentences and writing improved words, phrases and sentences above them. Draw arrows and carats (an inverted v, ) to show an insert of additional words, phrases, and sentences. 20