Lesson 34 Evaluating an Exemplar Second Body Paragraph

Lesson 34 Evaluating an Exemplar Second Body Paragraph for the RST 1

Evaluating an Exemplar Second Body Paragraph We will look at the exemplar second body paragraph and pick out the strengths of the paragraph. Notice that some words or phrases represent more than one strength. 2

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 3

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. First sentence is Indented. 4

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 5

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. States the Claim about the second Text. 6

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 7

Here’s the strength. An Example in your Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural own words that proves Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business your claim about the which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of second text. callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 8

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 9

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” A Quote that supports the example. This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 10

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 11

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred An Explanation of the Quote. trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 12

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 13

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big Another Example that helps to prove the claim. banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 14

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 15

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also A Quote that supports the example. calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 16

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 17

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural An Explanation of the Quote and Example. resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 18

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 19

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred Uses Explanation Phrases. trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 20

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 21

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish Uses Appropriate Transitions. wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 22

What strength do you see highlighted here? Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 23

Here’s the strength. Roosevelt reiterates these goals in his Inaugural Address, attacking the banks by saying, “there must be an end to a conduct in banking and in business which too often has given to a sacred trust the likeness of callous and selfish wrongdoing. ” This clearly repeats his plan to change the way we help big banks. He also calls again for more jobs, Uses a Verbal Phrase. announcing that, “our greatest primary task is to put people to work, ” but he wanted to do it in a different way, by “accomplishing greatly needed projects to stimulate and reorganize the use of our natural resources. ” This shows that Roosevelt wanted the government to create jobs but do it in way that would also help the economy in general. 24

Notice This paragraph hit two triple’s. The triple is always: 1. Example 2. Quote 3. Explanation Here they are again separated so you can see them easily. 25

Time to Revise Your Writing Now that you have evaluated an exemplar second body paragraph, use what you have learned to revise the paragraph that you wrote. Do not copy the exemplar paragraph but use it as a guide to make your paragraph better. Show your revisions by crossing out words, phrases, and sentences and writing improved words, phrases and sentences above them. Draw arrows and carats (an inverted v, ) to show an insert of additional words, phrases, and sentences. 26