Lesson 3 Writing Your Personal Memoir Using an
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Lesson 3 Writing Your Personal Memoir Using an Exemplar
The following slides contain a personal memoir. Identify the bolded strengths in blue BEFORE your teacher shows you the correct answer, and make suggestions on how to make this memoir better.
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant freak in Strengths 3
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant freak in Strengths A hook to engage the reader 4
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant freak in Strengths 5
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant freak in Strengths Higher level vocabulary 6
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry wascutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest Strengths 7
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry wascutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest Strengths Narrator’s feelings in very specific words 8
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant Strengths 9
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out of me. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant Strengths Describes narrator’s feelings in specific words 10
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out ofme. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant freak in Strengths 11
Exemplar I got jumped at a pretty bad time in my life. Not that there’s ever a good time. What I mean is that I was already deep in the vulnerability matrix. I had just entered seventh grade, was at peak adolescent craziness and, to make matters worse, was dealing with a new middle school whose dreary white middle class bigotry was cutting the heart out ofme. I wasn’t two periods into my first day before a classmate called me a name as if it were no big deal. Someone else asked me if my family ate dogs every day or only once in a while. By my third month, that school had me feeling like the poorest, ugliest immigrant freak in Strengths Told in first person 12
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Exemplar And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would have expected, but on the other side of the neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he Strength 14
Exemplar And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would have expected, but on the other side of the neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he Strength Uses specific, detailed, and relevant details 15
Exemplar And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would have expected, but on the other side of the neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he Strength 16
Exemplar And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would have expected, but on the other side of the neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he Strength Uses dialogue 17
Exemplar And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would have expected, but on the other side of the neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he Strength 18
Exemplar Strength And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would Identifies have expected, but on the other side of the characters neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he 19
Exemplar And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would have expected, but on the other side of the neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he Strength 20
Exemplar Strength And then came the beat-down. Not at school, as I would Descriptive have expected, but on the other side of the action verbs neighborhood. At the hands and feet of these three and verbals brothers I dimly knew. The youngest was my age, and on the day in question we had a spat over something — I can’t remember what. I do remember pushing him down hard onto the sidewalk and laughing about it, and the kid running off in tears, swearing he was going to kill me. Then the scene in my head jumps, and the next thing I know, the kid comes back with his two older brothers, and I’m getting my face punched in. The older brothers held me down and let the younger brother punch me all he 21
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Exemplar Strength My first real beat down, and I was furious and ashamed, but above all else I was afraid. Afraid of my assailants. Afraid they would corner me again. Afraid of a second beat down. Afraid and afraid. Eventually the bruises and the rage faded, but not the fear. The fear remained. An awful withering dread that coiled around my bowels — that followed me into my dreams. (‘‘Hit him in the teeth. ’’) I guess I should have told someone, but I was too humiliated. 23
Exemplar Strength Expresses My first real beat down, and I was furious and ashamed, feelings but above all else I was afraid. Afraid of my assailants. Afraid they would corner me again. Afraid of a Shows second beat down. Afraid and afraid and honesty afraid. Eventually the bruises and the rage faded, but not and the fear. The fear remained. An awful withering dread sincerity that coiled around my bowels — that followed me into my dreams. (‘‘Hit him in the teeth. ’’) I guess I should have told someone, but I was too humiliated. 24
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Exemplar Without even thinking about it, I started doing everything I could to duck the brothers. I shunned their part of the neighborhood. I started looking around buildings to make sure the coast was clear. I stayed in the apartment a lot. And whenever I saw the brothers, together or individually — in a car, on a bike, on foot — the fear would spike through me so powerfully that I felt as though I was going to lose my mind. In Dune, a novel I adored in those days, Frank Herbert observed that ‘‘Fear is the mind killer, ’’ and let me tell you, my man knows of what he speaks. When the brothers appeared, I couldn’t think for nothing. I would drop whatever I was doing and get away, and it was only later, after I calmed down, that I would realize what I had done. Strength 26
Exemplar Strength Without even thinking about it, I started doing everything I Describes could to duck the brothers. I shunned their part of the setting neighborhood. I started looking around buildings to make sure the coast was clear. I stayed in the apartment a lot. And whenever I saw the brothers, together or individually — in a car, on a bike, on foot — the fear would spike through me so powerfully that I felt as though I was going to lose my mind. In Dune, a novel I adored in those days, Frank Herbert observed that ‘‘Fear is the mind killer, ’’ and let me tell you, my man knows of what he speaks. When the brothers appeared, I couldn’t think for nothing. I would drop whatever I was doing and get away, and it was only later, after I calmed down, that I would realize what I had done. 27
Exemplar Without even thinking about it, I started doing everything I could to duck the brothers. I shunned their part of the neighborhood. I started looking around buildings to make sure the coast was clear. I stayed in the apartment a lot. And whenever I saw the brothers, together or individually — in a car, on a bike, on foot — the fear would spike through me so powerfully that I felt as though I was going to lose my mind. In Dune, a novel I adored in those days, Frank Herbert observed that ‘‘Fear is the mind killer, ’’ and let me tell you, my man knows of what he speaks. When the brothers appeared, I couldn’t think for nothing. I would drop whatever I was doing and get away, and it was only later, after I calmed down, that I would realize what I had done. Strength 28
Exemplar Strength Without even thinking about it, I started doing everything I could to duck the brothers. I shunned their part of the neighborhood. I started looking around buildings to make sure the coast was clear. I stayed in the apartment a lot. And whenever I saw the brothers, together or individually — in a car, on a bike, on foot — the fear would spike through me so powerfully that I felt as though I was going to lose my mind. In Dune, a novel I adored in those days, Frank Herbert observed that ‘‘Fear is the mind killer, ’’ and let me tell you, my man knows of what he speaks. When the brothers appeared, I couldn’t think for nothing. I would drop whatever I was doing and get away, and it was only later, after I calmed down, that I would realize what I had done. Pictureworthy images 29
Exemplar Without even thinking about it, I started doing everything I could to duck the brothers. I shunned their part of the neighborhood. I started looking around buildings to make sure the coast was clear. I stayed in the apartment a lot. And whenever I saw the brothers, together or individually — in a car, on a bike, on foot — the fear would spike through me so powerfully that I felt as though I was going to lose my mind. In Dune, a novel I adored in those days, Frank Herbert observed that ‘‘Fear is the mind killer, ’’ and let me tell you, my man knows of what he speaks. When the brothers appeared, I couldn’t think for nothing. I would drop whatever I was doing and get away, and it was only later, after I calmed down, that I would realize what I had done. Strength 30
Exemplar Strength Without even thinking about it, I started doing everything I could to duck the brothers. I shunned their part of the neighborhood. I started looking around buildings to make sure the coast was clear. I stayed in the apartment a lot. And whenever I saw the brothers, together or individually — in a car, on a bike, on foot — the fear would spike through me so powerfully that I felt as though I was going to lose my mind. In Dune, a novel I adored in those days, Frank Herbert observed that ‘‘Fear is the mind killer, ’’ and let me tell you, my man knows of what he speaks. When the brothers appeared, I couldn’t think for nothing. I would drop whatever I was doing and get away, and it was only later, after I calmed down, that I would realize what I had done. Reveals the narrator’s thoughts 31
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Exemplar Strength The brothers didn’t pursue me. They would jeer at me and occasionally throw rocks, but even if they weren’t chasing me in the flesh, they sure were chasing me in spirit. After these encounters, I would be a mess for days: depressed, irritable, hypervigilant, ashamed. I hated these brothers from the bottom of my heart, but even more than them, I hated myself for my cowardice. 33
Exemplar Strength The brothers didn’t pursue me. They would jeer at me and occasionally throw rocks, but even if they weren’t chasing me in the flesh, they sure were chasing me in spirit. After these encounters, I would be a mess for days: depressed, irritable, hypervigilant, ashamed. I hated these brothers from the bottom of my heart, but even more than them, I hated myself for my cowardice. Pictureworthy image 34
Exemplar Strength The brothers didn’t pursue me. They would jeer at me and occasionally throw rocks, but even if they weren’t chasing me in the flesh, they sure were chasing me in spirit. After these encounters, I would be a mess for days: depressed, irritable, hypervigilant, ashamed. I hated these brothers from the bottom of my heart, but even more than them, I hated myself for my cowardice. 35
Exemplar Strength The brothers didn’t pursue me. They would jeer at me and Reveals the occasionally throw rocks, but even if they weren’t chasing narrator’s me in the flesh, they sure were chasing me in spirit. After feelings these encounters, I would be a mess for days: depressed, irritable, hypervigilant, ashamed. I hated these brothers from the bottom of my heart, but even more than them, I hated myself for my cowardice. 36
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Exemplar Strength Took me until I was a sophomore in high school — yes, that long — before I finally found it in me to start facing my terror. What gave me courage? Maybe it was all the Robert Cormier I was reading — his young heroes were always asking themselves, ‘‘Do I dare disturb the universe? ’’ before ultimately deciding that yes, they did dare. Whatever it was, one day I found myself fleeing from a sighting of the brothers, and suddenly I was brought up short by an appalling vision: me running away forever. 38
Exemplar Strength Took me until I was a sophomore in high school — yes, that long — before I finally found it in me to start facing my terror. What gave me courage? Maybe it was all the Robert Cormier I was reading — his young heroes were always asking themselves, ‘‘Do I dare disturb the universe? ’’ before ultimately deciding that yes, they did dare. Whatever it was, one day I found myself fleeing from a sighting of the brothers, and suddenly I was brought up short by an appalling vision: me running away forever. Builds suspense, it makes the reader want to know what comes next and is curious 39
Exemplar Strength Took me until I was a sophomore in high school — yes, that long — before I finally found it in me to start facing my terror. What gave me courage? Maybe it was all the Robert Cormier I was reading — his young heroes were always asking themselves, ‘‘Do I dare disturb the universe? ’’ before ultimately deciding that yes, they did dare. Whatever it was, one day I found myself fleeing from a sighting of the brothers, and suddenly I was brought up short by an appalling vision: me running away forever. 40
Exemplar Strength Expresses Took me until I was a sophomore in high school — yes, thoughts in that long — before I finally found it in me to start facing the form of my terror. What gave me courage? Maybe it was all the dialogue Robert Cormier I was reading — his young heroes were always asking themselves, ‘‘Do I dare disturb the universe? ’’ before ultimately deciding that yes, they did dare. Whatever it was, one day I found myself fleeing from a sighting of the brothers, and suddenly I was brought up short by an appalling vision: me running away forever. 41
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Exemplar Strength I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. 43
Exemplar Strength Descriptive I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was action verbs turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. 44
Exemplar Strength I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. 45
Exemplar I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. Strength Includes a memorable ending and does not dwell upon the lesson. Leaves it up to the reader. 46
Exemplar Strength I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. 47
Exemplar Strength I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. Figure of speech. The saying is “I have met the enemy and they are mine. ” It is also a pun, a play on words. 48
Exemplar Strength I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. 49
Exemplar Strength Verbal I forced myself to stop. I forced myself to turn irony. The toward them, and it felt as if the whole world was author is turning with me. I couldn’t make myself walk being toward them, I could barely even look at them, so I sarcastic. settled for standing still. As the brothers approached, the ground started tilting out from under me. One of them scowled. And then, without a word, they walked past. I had met the enemy and it was I. I, the superhero. 50
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