Jane Schaffer Writing Method RiceModified Version Flash of

Jane Schaffer Writing Method Rice-Modified Version

Flash of four: How familiar are you with the Jane Schaffer Writing Format? 1. 2. 3. 4. Very familiar Familiar I’ve heard of it I’ve never heard of it

The secret formula for all body paragraphs: CHUNK TOPIC SENTENCE (TS) SUBTOPIC SENTENCE (#1) CONCRETE DETAIL (CD #1) COMMENTARY (CM #2) SUBTOPIC SENTENCE (#2) CONCRETE DETAIL (CD #2) COMMENTARY (CM #1) COMMENTARY (CM #2) CONCLUDING SENTENCE (CS)

Topic Sentence (TS) • Most of the time, it’s the first sentence of each body paragraph • Explains to the reader what that individual paragraph will be about • Provides the main idea • Every sentence in this paragraph supports this sentence directly. • Example TS for Body Paragraph #1: If students started school later, they would have more time to get a good night’s sleep which may increase student engagement and comprehension.

SUBTOPIC SENTENCES • The subtopic sentence introduces the part of the topic sentence you are elaborating on. • They nicely cut the topic sentence in half. • There are TWO in each body paragraph and they are found before each CONCRETE DETAIL. • Example of subtopic sentence #1: • We all know that sleep is essential when it comes to engaging in cognitive tasks.

Concrete Details (CD) • Specific details that form the backbone or core of your body paragraphs. • Concrete details can include facts, specifics, examples, descriptions, illustrations, support, proof, evidence, quotations, paraphrasing, or plot references. • Example CD #1 for Body Paragraph #1: According to Health. com, if young people got the recommended 9 hours of sleep they need, students would be more awake in class and apt to engage in lessons without feeling drowsy.

Commentary #1 (CM #1) • The commentary sentences are your opinion or comment about this concrete detail. They include your opinion, insight, analysis, interpretations, inference, personal response, feelings, evaluations, explication, and reflection. • This is when you explain the quote/statistic/paraphrase that you included in the concrete detail. • Example CM #1 for CD #1: This means that students would be more awake and able to pay attention to lessons, improving the quality of their engagement.

Commentary #2 (CM #2) • Further explains the concrete detail and sets the reader up to read the next concrete detail. • Must start with a transition word/phrase! • Example CM #2 for CD #1: Furthermore, when students’ levels of engagement increase, they are more likely to see the utility the material that is being taught.

Subtopic sentence #2 • It makes sense that when we are engaged in learning something, we remember it better.

Your turn! In pairs, given the CD #2, write corresponding CMs to the paragraph using these sentence frames. My English teacher, Mr. Rice, stated that, “This increased engagement leads to increased student comprehension. ” This means that ___________. Also, this increased comprehension can result in ____________.

Concluding Sentence (CS) • The last sentence of your body paragraph sums up your ideas, reflects on what you said in your essay, says more commentary about your subject, or gives a personal statement about the subject. • Does not include concrete details or repeat key words from your paper or thesis and introductory paragraph. It gives a finished feeling to your whole paragraph. • Example CS for Body Paragraph #1: To conclude, a later start time will likely result in more sleep for students, thus increasing their engagement and comprehension in the classroom.

If students started school later, they would have more time to get a good night’s sleep which may increase student engagement and comprehension. We all know that sleep is essential when it comes to engaging in cognitive tasks. According to Health. com, if young people got the recommended 9 hours of sleep they need, students would be more awake in class and apt to engage in lessons without feeling drowsy. This means that students would be more awake and able to pay attention to lessons, improving the quality of their engagement. Furthermore, when students’ levels of engagement increase, they are more likely to see the utility of the material that is being taught. It makes sense that when we are engaged in learning something, we remember it better. My English teacher, Mr. Rice, stated that, “This increased engagement leads to increased student comprehension. ” This means that students will be able to retain the skills and information that is being learned that day. Also, this increased comprehension can result in increased student performance. To conclude, a later start time will likely result in more sleep for students, thus increasing their engagement and comprehension in the classroom.

Thank you for participating in the modified Jane Schaffer training! Yes, this is very formulaic but if you cannot do this, you are not allowed to eventually mix it up in your own way. And your children will grow horns.