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国際化推進部門 (GWP) http: //gwp. t. u-tokyo. ac. jp/ Academic Writing and Academic Presentation English w. RIting Consultant (ERIC) 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 3

Academic Writing の内容 回数 日 第 1回 4/5 第 2回 4/19 内容 コースガイダンス 英語論文の書き方の基礎 Email, cover letter, CV/ Resume 第 3回 4/26 英語論文の書き方 Essay/ Thesis writing 第 4回 第 5回 英語ライティングの実際 1 Academic paper 第 6回 5/10 5/17 5/24 英語ライティングの実際 2 Academic paper 第 7回 5/31 英語アカデミック・プレゼンテーション Presentation and Discussion 2017/4/19 Proficiency Test Academic Writing 2 4

Academic Presentationの内容 回数 日 内容 第 8回 6/7 Presentation 演習 1 第 9回 6/14 Presentation 演習 2 第 10回 6/21 Presentation 演習 3 第 11回 6/28 Presentation 演習 4 第 12回 7/5 Presentation 演習 5 第 13回 7/12 Presentation 演習 6 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 5

Academic Writing 評価ポリシー 1. Take all 7 lectures and participate in them (30%) 2. Take a proficiency test on 5/17 (must） 3. Submit assignments（70%）by email to ees. seut@gmail. com • Report 1: Email writing. Due on 4/26 • Report 2: First draft of your paper. Due on 5/17 • Report 3: Final paper, 3 A 4 pages. Due on 5/24 一日遅れる毎に 5点引き 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 6

Proficiency Test • TOEICのような客観テスト • Aural comprehension 100点 Structure 100点 • Multiple choice • 成績には影響しない • プレゼンのクラス分けに用いる（足切りも） • 5/17 実施　黒鉛筆、消しゴム持参 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 8

Presentation Practice • 9 -10 students × 6 groups • Instructors from Kurdyla&Associates and Westgate 科学論文のエディティング, 　プレゼンテーション専門 • 自分の研究テーマについてプレゼンテーション をする 10 minutes: presentation 10 minutes: Q & A, 10 minutes: Comments from instructors • 一回に 3人発表 × 3 days × ２周 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 9

CV Em Ac /R ai ad es l em um ic e pa pe r Ap Th e Ge plic sis ne at i Cr ral ons iti wr ca iti l t ng hi nk Sp ing Co eak ve ing rl et Re ter ad in g What this class will be about? Questionnaire results 35 30 25 20 15 10 5 0 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 16

Topics • Journals and conference papers • Advice on the structure of general documents • Professional writing: CV, emails, applications or cover letters • Technical language/transitions • Language for discussions 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 17

Class Project • You will write a small paper (3 A 4 pages long). It can be based on your research topic or on a literature review related to a topic of your interest. • You will start working on your paper on May 10 and will finish it and submit it on May 24. Bring your laptop. • Decide on your topic before May 10, if you have questions or need help, ask us or email us. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 18

Today’s agenda 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. Logical writing Argumentative writing How to start writing Writing process Letter and email writing Cover letter CV/Resume 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 19

Purdue Online Writing Lab http: //owl. english. purdue. edu/owl/resource/659/ 01/ • Logic is a formal system of analysis • Logic helps writers invent, demonstrate, and prove arguments. 命題 • It works by testing propositions against one another. • To be logical, a proposition must be tested within a logical sequence. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 20

Language formal writing • avoid everyday, colloquial language; slang or jargon • avoid contractions (I’m; it’ll, etc. ) • avoid emotive, subjective language (terrible, rubbish, etc. ) • avoid vague words such as nice, good, get etc. • modal verbs such as would, could, should will add politeness and respectfulness Would be grateful if you could send me… 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 21

論述（Argumentative Writing） 複雑な問題になると１パラグ ラフでは表せない Multi paragraph=Essay • Introductory paragraph • Body paragraph • Concluding paragraph Introductory paragraph Topic sentence Supporting sentence Concluding sentence Body Topic sentence Supporting sentence Concluding paragraph Topic sentence メタ構造になる Supporting sentence Concluding sentence 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 22

I strongly believe that nuclear power generation should not be prohibited. My primary reason is 30 % of electricity is supplied by nuclear power so if the nuclear power generation is prohibited, human beings cannot live a cultural life with the supplied electricity. Some other reason is that other ways of electric power generation such as wind power or thermal power are very unstable to be relied on. Wind power or hydroelectric power in Japan has been weather dependent and their sources have not been secured. Some people might believe that the nuclear power generation should be prohibited because it’s not safe. However, prohibiting the nuclear power generation would slow down the growth of the world economy because other ways are still not ready to substitute for nuclear power. For those reasons above, I state again that the nuclear power generation shouldn’t be prohibited. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 24 24

I do not think that the nuclear power generation in Japan is reasonable. It should be prohibited. My primary reason for this is that the nuclear power generation is dangerous when something unexpected happens. If natural disasters such as earthquakes or tsunami happen, it cannot be controlled. In the US, for example, they have a bad memory of “Three Mile Islands disaster”, US Congress denied to build new power plants because they are not safe. Another reason is that the other power generation systems such as hydro electric power generation, thermal or wind power generation are becoming popular because they are clean, safe and environment friendly. That means by using them, the earth gets healthier and more ecological. For these reasons above, I state again that the nuclear power generation in Japan should be prohibited as soon as possible. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 25 25

Write a small argumentative paragraph Make pairs. Choose a question and answer providing two reasons to support your decision, then conclude. Discuss with your partner: • Do you prefer to be the leader or a group member? • Do you prefer to study in the morning or at night? • Do you prefer to plan everything or to be spontaneous? 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 26

How to start writing Brainstorm. Any ideas related to the topic Connect the topics and evaluate them Discard those that cannot be included Define a basic outline and organize your content • At the beginning just write, don’t worry about grammar, spelling or syntax. • Be flexible. If more ideas occur to you, don’t be afraid to redefine your content. • • 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 27

Brain Storming Write down ideas came up to your mind Grouping inward thinking Build a logic Conclusion Cause & Effect check If-then check Returning Writing Conclusion Logics to support Ideas in groups 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 28

Idea Generation Think of your topic and make a brainstorm idea idea idea idea 2017/4/19 idea Academic Writing 2 idea 29

Outline This is the outline Dominant conception paragraph paragraph sentence sentence sentence sentence sentence subordinate conception 30 Academic Writing 2 2017/4/19 paragraph sentence 2017/4/19 Chapter

Writing Process １．Idea Generation 　 Brainstorming, mind-map, clustering ２．Outline Dominant conception → subordinate conception ３．Write 　　Coherence and cohesion　 ４．Proofread, peer review ５．Feedback ６．Rewrite 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 31

Two main characteristics of good writing: - Coherence. Link of ideas - Cohesion. Grammatical link of ideas 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 32

Cohesion（横のつながり） • Reference 　it, them, he The liquid was heated in a glass jar. It exploded. • Conjunction Additive: and, moreover, also, additionally Adversative: but, however, yet, on the other hand Causal: because, as a result Temporal: first, finally, then Others: after all, now, well • Lexical chain 語彙の連関 (語の言い換え, 類義語) 　　　Tokyo, the capital of Japan, is a big city where many people live. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 33

Coherence（縦のまとまり） • Consistency of logic（一つのパラグラフの中に） 　 Topic sentences Supporting Sentences　 　　　　　 Concluding Sentences 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 reason 1 reason 2 34

Write an essay in English (submission is optional) • Which do you think is better, to go to overseas universities (such as Harvard or MIT) for a Bachelor degree or to stay in Japan and study at U of Tokyo until you finish your undergraduate course? • 学生は学部から海外(ハーバード、ＭＩＴなど）で 学ぶほうがよいか、あるいは日本で（東大で）学 部は学ぶ方がよいか。 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 35

Letter & email writing 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 37

Formal Letter • Job applications • Covering letters for surveys • Thank you letter for your professor, etc. • • • in the correct format　（正しいフォーマット） short and to the point　（短く簡潔） relevant　（関連している） free of any grammatical or spelling mistakes polite, even if you’re complaining　（丁寧に） well presented　（うまく書かれている） 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 38

　　 Mr. E. Scrooge The Manager 相手のaddress Barclay’s Bank Ltd 113 Mammon Street Andover HU 4 9 ET date 5 April 2003 salutation Dear Mr. Scrooge, message ending Email, 2017/4/19 telephone 42, Greyhound Road Perry Barr Birmingham B 42 6 HJ 自分のaddress 　　　I am a student at the University of Tokyo. I would like to apply for the job you posted on your website. 　　fewjfi 4 wfr 9 i 4 r f 4 lfjo 48 f, . , fduvyqk 4 em, m 4, . . v, , miij hjuyhwn. (you can add the reason why you apply) 　I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon. 　　　Yours sincerely, 　　　　　 Jane Teller 　　　　　 Academic Writing 2 39 　　　　　telephone number

自分のaddress （ブロックスタイル） 相手のaddress （ブロックスタイル） Whitcomb Polytechnic 20 -30 Newcastle Road Whitcomb Tyne and Wear WT 5 4 AH 11 October 1997 The General Manager Fukuoka Motors (UK) Ltd PO Box 137 York Road Loughton Durham LT 3 5 HD Dear Sir I understand from my colleague, Professor William Jones, who visited your Loughton plant last month, that you sometimes allow groups of students to tour the factory and see for themselves how Japanese production techniques operate in a European environment. Professor Jones himself was most impressed by his own visit, and recommended that I write to you. Would it be possible for a group of 20 Business Studies students - male and female, aged between 18 and 22 - from Whitcomb Polytechnic to visit you before the end of this term, which is on the 21 December? I realize that you must receive many requests for such visits, and that the time available may already be booked up. If it is not, and you are able to see us, I should be most grateful if you could suggest a date and let me know of any normal conditions you lay down for visits of this kind. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully B Farrant (Dr) Senior Lecturer bfar@gmaal. com 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 Source: http: //www. henley-cov. ac. uk/public/xfiles/general/progarea/Overseas/LCCI/Level 2/Letter/Lesson 1. doc 40

Email writing • • • フォーマット 件名　　　 subject header 宛名 salutation 書き出し opening 本文　　　 actual message 終わり ending • 署名 2017/4/19 signature Academic Writing 2 41

Use a short and accurate subject header. “meeting schedule”というより“meeting on Apr. 18 th“ の方がメールボックスで探しやすい Use a proper salutation Dear or Hello (Mr. Mrs. Ms. or Dr. ) with their last name, "Dear Sir/Madam" or "Dear Sir or Madam“: Respected Sir, Dear Professor Morimura, 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 42

Introduce yourself in the first paragraph (if necessary). なぜこのメールを書いているのか、 どうやってこのアドレスを知ったか. My name is so & so and I am a researcher at XXX. I hope all is well. (Hope this email finds you well. ) Write the actual message トピックでparagraphsに分け、more logical and わかりやすくする The reason why I’m writing this email to you is to… It would be nice if you could …… Let me know if you can …… 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 43

添付書類がある場合 　Attached please find a file of …. I have enclosed the revised contract. For closing, write the action the reader should take　読み手が取るべき行動を書く looking forward to hearing, please call me back, I’ll be waiting for your reply. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 44

Use the correct form of leave-taking (ending). • Yours sincerely, • Yours cordially, • Respectfully, • Best regards, • Best wishes, • All the best, Sometimes, the best way to end an email if you want a response is gratitude. • Thanks in advance • Thank you 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 45

Sign with your full name/job title/company Job title が無くてもこのメールの内容に関連する your own blog or websiteがあれば link を 　 your nameの下に. 　 telephone number, student IDなども名前の下に Proofread your message for content, spelling and grammar 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 46

Email Format To: : send From: : Date: : Subject: : Salutation Thank you letter Opening Follow up letters Actual message Acceptance, rejection letters Ending Your name 2017/4/19 Attachment: : Academic Writing 2 47

Cover letter for submitting a paper Should we use the letter head? 1 1. Your address 2. Receiver’s address 3. Your name & email address 2 Dear Editor: I would like to submit the manuscript for possible publication in Journal of … On behalf of my coauthors, I am sending the enclosed manuscript entitled …… Sincerely yours, 3 2017/4/19 The entire paper is not being submitted to any other journals. Academic Writing 2 48

Cover letter for an application 1 2 Dear selection committee: Sincerely yours, 3 2017/4/19 • • • Be organized and go to the point Research about the job Follow normal letter etiquette The application has to be tailor-made. Use letterhead when possible Paragraph 1. Introduce yourself and express your interest in the position Paragraph 2. Describe your current activity and achievements Paragraph 3. Details about your experience and work in the field of the application. Paragraph 4. Your specific interest in the job and company, focus on specific characteristics Paragraph 5. “I look forward to hearing from you soon” Academic Writing 2 49

Curriculum Vitae and Resume • A curriculum vitae is an extensive document (two or more pages), with the full record of your career, including awards, publications and activities. Usually in chronological order. • A resume is a brief document (one page) with your more outstanding qualities for a certain job. List of your skills and achievements relevant to the job. Free format. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 50

Sections in a CV While you’re a student, try to keep it as short as possible, follow a chronological order. You can follow this structure. • Education • (Work) Experience. Include internships, teaching assistantships or workshops • Skills • Activities • Awards 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 Optional • Objective • Leadership • Community Service • Professional memberships • Publications 51

Contents Contact Information : First, Last Name, Address, Tel: , Mobile: , Email: Career Objective Summary (Career Highlights / Qualifications) Education: College, Degree, Awards, Honors Experience: Company Name, Dates Worked, Job Title, Responsibilities & Achievements Certificates Skills: computer skills, language skills. 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 52

実例配布 注目点 　-時間軸 　-分量 　-各項目に何が 書かれているか 　-ResumeとCVの違い （personal info) -デザイン 2017/4/19 Education Skills Interest Experience Academic Writing 2 53

いろいろなスキル 1. 職務上の能力とは過去のいろいろな職務経験から取得で きたスキル 　　　例： leading, persuading, organizing, problem solving, 　　　　　　negotiating, and coordinating 　　　　　　これらはどの会社でも職務要件に記載できる 2．　個人的な能力とはあなたの個性を説明できるようなスキル　　　　 　　　このスキルはObjective又はSummaryに記載可 　　　英文レジュメのスキルの項目Skillsには記入しない 　　　例：accurate, active, conscientious, creative, dependable, efficient, energetic, motivated, outgoing, productive, reliable, self-disciplined, and successful 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 54

Assignment 1 • Choose one of the situations and send an email to ees. seut@gmail. com for that purpose • Prepare your CV and send it along • The email and CV have to be written in ENGLISH and follow the structure given • The CV should be limited to one page 2017/4/19 Academic Writing 2 58