Gothic Essay Revision Editing SelfRevision Read your own

Gothic Essay Revision & Editing

Self-Revision �Read your own introduction/ highlight thesis statement. �Check that you have listed any traits or ideas in the EXACT ORDER they appear in the essay/ your thesis statement should OUTLINE your essay �Make changes in order as needed.

Self-Revision Continued �Highlight WORD GLUE in your topic sentences & concluding sentences in EACH BODY paragraph �If you are missing this word glue, add it in now. �If you are missing either the topic sentence or concluding sentence of a paragraph, add it in now.

Self-Revision Continued �Highlight QUOTES �Check that they are blended! If they are not, please blend them now. �Label the TCS of each quotation sentence: ◦ Transition, context, and speaker ◦ For example, just when Jack is about to attack Danny, he turns on himself, saying, “quote”. �If you are missing the TCS for any quote, add it in now.

Random pass to anyone in the room. � Read the introduction paragraph only/ label each part of the paragraph in the margin: ◦ ◦ ◦ � If Attention-grabber at the beginning Transition into block quote Block quote Transition out of block quote Thesis statement any part is missing, please make a note in the margin. any part does not flow like it should/ if you have to STOP at any point because you’re lost or something doesn’t make sense, put an * in that spot because the writer needs to revise!

Pass the essay to a new person. �Read the first topic sentence of the first body paragraph and THEN thesis. �Does the topic sentence connect to thesis? �Does it contain word glue back to thesis? �Is it about the first idea listed in thesis statement? ◦ Make notes as needed.

Same person. � Read the first body paragraph and label the parts of the paragraph in the margins: ◦ ◦ ◦ ◦ � If Topic Sentence Quote #1 Commentary (at least two sentences) Quote #2 Commentary (at least two sentences) Quote #3 ***(depending on essay) Commentary (at least two sentences) Concluding sentence any part is missing, please make a note in the margin.

Pass the essay to a new person. �Read the topic sentence of the second body paragraph and THEN thesis. �Does the topic sentence connect to thesis? �Does it contain word glue back to thesis? �Is it about the first idea listed in thesis statement? ◦ Make notes as needed.

Same person. � Read the second body paragraph and label the parts of the paragraph in the margins: ◦ ◦ ◦ ◦ � If Topic Sentence Quote #1 Commentary (at least two sentences) Quote #2 Commentary (at least two sentences) Quote #3 ***(depending on essay) Commentary (at least two sentences) Concluding sentence any part is missing, please make a note in the margin.

Pass the essay to a new person. �Read the topic sentence of the third body paragraph and THEN thesis. �Does the topic sentence connect to thesis? �Does it contain word glue back to thesis? �Is it about the first idea listed in thesis statement? ◦ Make notes as needed.

Same person. � Read the third body paragraph and label the parts of the paragraph in the margins: ◦ ◦ ◦ ◦ � If Topic Sentence Quote #1 Commentary (at least two sentences) Quote #2 Commentary (at least two sentences) Quote #3 ***(depending on essay) Commentary (at least two sentences) Concluding sentence any part is missing, please make a note in the margin.

Pass to a new person. �Skim read the entire essay for PRESENT TENSE VERBS– only OUTSIDE of the quotes!! �Danny �Jack says, “quote. ” screams, “quote. ” �Circle any verbs that slip into past tense and may need to be changed

Pass back to the owner. �Take your commentary deeper. �Add another sentence of commentary to EACH quote! �Use the commentary handout to do this. Write the new sentence in the margins/ back of your essay!!