FOUR PAGE REQUIRED MINIMUM Revision and editing REQUIRED

� FOUR PAGE REQUIRED MINIMUM? !? ! � Revision and editing. REQUIRED!!

� The first time the novel is mentioned, you must state the author’s full name, spelled correctly �When referring to the author after this, use last name only �With movie, use director and/or actor’s name � Book titles/Movie titles are italicized only � Claims cannot just be factual- must be arguable or analytical � Don’t assume to know what Steinbeck or Sinese thoughtyou can only work with what is presented � BAD- Sinese changed the character of Curley’s wife in the movie because he wanted people to be more sympathetic about her � GOOD- Sinese changed the character of Curley’s wife, which makes the movie version of her much more sympathetic

� If the claim states that both the movie and novel teach many important lessons, what should the topic of EVERY body paragraph be? � Grammar- are words such as Affair and Movie capitalized? What about great depression? � Can you use the word “you” in this type of writing? � Don’t misinterpret! �George killed Lennie because he was too much trouble to have around �In the novel, Curley’s wife was a very sympathetic character � Does the essay even make sense? �What does it mean to be “abstemious like an action”

� Claim: The movie is designed to appeal to modern audiences �Body paragraph 1 - The character of Curley’s wife is portrayed differently �Body paragraph 2 - The character of Crooks is portrayed differently � Does the movie and novel need to be mentioned in every body paragraph in this essay? �One essay only compared and contrasted the movie and novel in the first body paragraph �One essay didn’t mention the novel after body paragraph 1 �Be CLEAR when you are discussing novel and when you are discussing film Reader/viewer

� Use of the word “emotions” �“Emotions he put in the book”- what does this mean? The emotions the reader felt? The emotions the characters exemplified? You can’t “put emotion in” �Characters have emotions- as a reader you can interpret their emotions through their actions, dialogue. Steinbeck doesn’t ever write, “Lennie was feeling (insert emotion here) �Readers can have emotional reactions, or emotional attachments, to character

� Trying to cover too many examples (pieces of evidence) in one paragraph- need warrant to explain. Many of you put enough pieces of evidence for your entire paper into one paragraph �Each paragraph should have 1 focus, 1 topic- then prove that one thing well � Trying to cover too much in the overall essay- edit, omit. Pick vital pieces of evidence and truly explain them with depth �Many of you put three separate pieces of evidence in one paragraph that could have been three paragraphs worth of info

�Mini-claim �Evidence How it is presented in novel How it is presented in movie �Warrant- explanation of the effect of the differences in novel or movie (can go after each piece of evidence or at end) �Conclude • • Make sure it supports claim If movie omitted something, that can be one sentence. Most of the paragraph will be about how something is portrayed in the novel (ie. -This scene is left out of the movie entirely)- then explain the effect of this.