Effective Embedding of Modifiers Two clauses that share

Effective Embedding of Modifiers Two clauses that share a common category can often be embedded one within the other. My brother opened the window. The maid had closed it. becomes My brother opened the window the maid had closed.

Ineffective Embedding of Modifiers But extensive embedding, like adding optional categories, can overload a sentence: My brother opened the window the maid the janitor Uncle Bill had hired had married had closed. (Yuck!) Most writers would express these propositions in two or more sentences: My brother opened the window the maid had closed. She was the one who had married the janitor Uncle Bill had hired.

Tone �Tone in writing is not really any different than the tone of your voice. You know that sometimes it is not “what” you say, but “how” you say it.

Tone �Examples of tone in a story include just about any adjective you can imagine: �Scared �Anxious �Excited �Worried �Foolish �Smart �Depressing

Voice "You know writing has voice if … �It shows the writer's personality �It sounds different from everyone else's �It contains feelings and emotions �The words come to life �It comes from the heart

Comma Slice You can’t join two sentences together with a comma. �Andre sank a perfect basket from half court, unfortunately the coach’s back was turned.

Conjunctions �But �Until �Because �When �As �Or �Than

Comparative and superlative adjectives and adverbs One-Syllable Adjective Form- Comparative Form Superlative taller tallest older oldest longer longest

Possessive Plural Nouns �Most plural nouns already end in s. To create their possessive, simply add an apostrophe after the s: �The Pepins' house is the big blue on the corner. �The lions' usual source of water has dried up. �The gases' odors mixed and became nauseating. �The witches' brooms were hidden in the corner. �The babies' beds were all in a row.