EDITING VS REVISION Today Editing Editing vs Revision

EDITING VS. REVISION Today: Editing

Editing vs. Revision • Editing – Making a paper correct • Revision – Making a paper better

Your turn • What do you think you did wrong? • What are your normal editing problem spots?

What I saw… • COMMAS • Comma splices • Missing commas • Apostrophes • Random capitalization • Quotes within quotes • British things (1776) • MLA issues

Commas • Comma splice: • Search for all your commas • Do you see any commas splitting a sentence in half? • Are both halves of that sentence complete sentences themselves? • Jane was sure it was haunted, Mrs. Reed forced her to stay up there all night all alone. • This shows that Jane believes people will be accountable for their actions on earth, and if they are righteous that they will live again.

Commas • St. John is much like her, he found an impossible love, and gave it up for the Lord. • Helen was a very cool and collected person and even though she stands strongly for what she believes she was very quiet about it.

4 ways to fix a comma splice Jane loved Thornfield, the estate became her first true home. 1. 2. 3. 4.

Commas • Missing commas: • Frequently tied to dependent clauses • Search for: • After, although, as if, because, before, even if, even though, if, in order to, since, though, unless, until, whatever, whenever, whether, while

Commas • Dependent clauses: An almost-complete sentence that cannot stand alone • Despite her own perception of her beauty other people thought of her as beautiful. • As time continues Jane and Rochester become closer and more comfortable in each other’s presence. • When he starts to develop feelings for Mrs. Rosamond he ignores them simply because she is not practical for him. • After some years of being at Lowood she realizes that she has caged herself from the world.

Commas • Appositives & interjections: Paired commas need to set off information that is not critical to a sentence • If it can be removed, it can be put in paired commas • Jane Eyre a gothic romance written by Charlotte Bronte is a book full of saints and sinners. • But really, in life surgery and makeup do not show who people really are, giving people a fake figure and personality instead of a real person born with natural beauty and real personalities. • But on the inside Jane learns that it is yet another place full of pain and suffering, this time for more than just her.

Apostrophes • Show possession or ownership with an apostrophe • Mr. Rochesters house burned down. • Jane Eyres aunt was awful. • The houses secrets were revealed. • From Gateshead hall, with it’s haunted room, to Lowood • She collapses on the doorstep of St. John and his sisters house.

Random capitalization • Nouns: People, places, things, ideas • Proper nouns: SPECIFIC nouns • Common nouns: Non-specific nouns • If it’s not proper OR starting a quote (sometimes), you shouldn’t be capitalizing it • Jane asked, “Reader, do you know, as I do, what terror those cold people can put into the ice of their questions? • She is interested in Mr. Rochester for two reasons: One, because she knows… • Her Aunt hated Jane and mistreated her. • There was “no unforced natural fruit delighted by its freshness. ”

Quotes within quotes • If you’ve got a quote within a quote, use a mix of single quotes and double quotes: Mr. Brocklehurst starts by saying, “‘No sight so sad as that of a naughty child, ’ he began, ‘especially a naughty little girl. Do you know where the wicked go after death? ’ ‘They go to hell, ’ was my ready and orthodox answer. ”

British things (1776) • She realises that she has caged herself from the world. • “Nothing bloomed spontaneously on that soil”.

MLA issues • What requirement must a quote meet before it is put into the block format? • “This was no unforced natural fruit delighted by its freshness. ” (Bronte 174).

My favorite error • You can only imagine how happy Jane was when she heard she was going to a school for girls called Lowood.

Careful wording… • Drunk gets nine months in violin case • Farmer Bill Dies in House • Iraqi head seeks arms • Squad helps dog bite victim • Arson suspect held in Massachusetts fire • Include your children when baking cookies

Editing & Revising EDITING REVISING • C: Capitalization (1 st word in • A: Add sentences, words, a sentence, proper nouns) quotes, and analysis • R: Remove unnecessary words, sentences, and details • M: Move around words, ideas, or sentences • S: Substitute words or sentences for others • U: Understanding (paper makes sense, flows well, has indents where needed) • P: Punctuation (periods, question marks, quotation marks, commas, semicolons, etc. ) • S: Spelling (CHECK IT)