Drafting and Revising Introduction Writing your first draft

Drafting and Revising Introduction Writing your first draft Revising your draft Proofreading and correcting your draft Talk About It Your Turn Tech Tools in this presentation • Wikis • Storyboards • Using Find to help in revision

Introduction Drafting your research paper is like creating a painting from an initial sketch. A rough sketch provides an overall plan for the painting. Then, an artist uses paint to add color and detail.

Introduction You have already sketched out your ideas in an early organizational plan, which you developed into a formal outline. Now you will add details and transitions to build your outline into a first draft.

Writing your first draft Your introduction is your chance to capture your reader’s attention and state your thesis. Pique your audience’s curiosity with a striking detail or quotation. Provide necessary background information. Transition smoothly to your thesis statement. “Into the furnace let me go alone” (Mc. Kay 15). In this line, poet Claude Mc. Kay describes the anguish of facing discrimination. He wrote the line in response to the racial conflicts he witnessed after moving to New York City. Mc. Kay’s early poetry collections reflect how his life changed after he immigrated to the United States from Jamaica.

Writing your first draft As you write the body of your paper, each main section (I, III level) will become the topic of one or more paragraphs. Claude Mc. Kay was born and raised in Sunny Ville, Jamaica.

Writing your first draft Each subtopic in your outline (A, B, C level) will become the main idea of one or more paragraphs in your paper. Claude Mc. Kay was born and raised in Sunny Ville, Jamaica. Mc. Kay’s education in Jamaica came from both formal and informal sources.

Writing your first draft Each supporting detail (1, 2, 3 level) in your outline will provide facts, reasons, and examples to support your main ideas. Claude Mc. Kay was born and raised in Sunny Ville, Jamaica. Mc. Kay’s education in Jamaica came from both formal and informal sources. Mc. Kay had nine older siblings. One of his older brothers, a teacher, took on the responsibility of providing his early schooling.

Writing your first draft As you develop your body paragraphs, you must elaborate on the material in your outline. Support main points with facts, statistics, reasons, examples, or quotations from your notes. Clarify connections between concepts by synthesizing information and using transition words and phrases.

Writing your first draft Use transitions to integrate summaries, paraphrases, and quotations smoothly into your writing. Mc. Kay published the collection Songs of Jamaica in 1912. In these poems, Mc. Kay uses dialect to in 1912. “Mc. Kay is able to capture the musical “capture the musical voices of his homeland” (Rashad 44). The quotation in this example disrupts the flow of ideas by introducing a new idea without proper connection. Adding a transition before the quotation clarifies the connection between the author’s ideas.

Writing your first draft Remember to cite the source of any quotation, fact, or idea from a source other than you. Use parenthetical citations to credit sources within your paper. A parenthetical citation lists the author’s last name and the page number that contains the information. In these poems, Mc. Kay uses dialect to “capture the musical voices of his homeland” (Rashad 44). Your readers can refer to a citation to locate the appropriate entry in your Works Cited list. Rashad, Harim. Claude Mc. Kay’s Dialect Poems. New York: Literary Press, 2005. Print.

Writing your first draft An effective conclusion provides a final assessment of your ideas without repeating your introduction. Leave a strong impression by restating thesis. Mc. Kay’s early poems reflect his move from Jamaica to the United States. By contrasting Mc. Kay’s works created in Jamaica with Review the purpose of those written in New York, your research and draw readers learn how facing final conclusions about discrimination changed Mc. Kay’s your topic. purpose for writing poetry. Mc. Kay inspired further Close your paper by leaving the reader with generations to use poetry as a a new thought or form of social protest. insight.

Tech Tool: Wikis If you have access to a wiki for your research project, consider using it to compose drafts of your paper. Drafting your work in a wiki allows you to: save and review all versions of your paper easily receive feedback on your work throughout the process access your work from any Internet-ready computer

Tech Tool: Wikis The Edit page mode of a wiki offers the same features as most word-processing programs. Use the toolbar at the top of the screen to format your text. Remember to save your work often!

Tech Tool: Wikis The wiki toolbar also includes buttons to add multimedia components to your draft. Hyperlink text Insert images Some wikis also allow you to insert plug-ins such as video clips, calendars, or picture slideshows. Attach files

Tech Tool: Storyboards You may be drafting a multimodal presentation, a format that combines text with images and sound. You can use a storyboard to describe how text, images, and sound go together in your multimodal presentation. Your storyboard can be accompanied by a script that presents any narration that you will use.

Tech Tool: Storyboards Here is an example of a student’s storyboard for a multimodal presentation about the poetry of Claude Mc. Kay. The simple sketches on the left represent images used in the project. The notations on the right explain audio, video, and animation components.

Revising your draft Once your initial draft is complete, you are ready to begin revising your draft. Ask yourself the following questions about your draft: 1. Does my introduction grab the reader’s attention, provide an overview of the topic, and state my thesis? 2. Does my thesis include a clear controlling idea? 3. Have I supported my ideas with factual information?

Revising your draft 4. Have I used paraphrases, summaries, and direct quotations effectively? 5. Have I credited sources when necessary? 6. Have I used correct MLA or APA format in my citations? 7. Have I presented my ideas in a logical order? 8. Does my conclusion restate my thesis?

Tech Tool: Using Find to help in revision You can use the Find feature of your word-processing program to help you proofread your research paper. To access this feature, select Find from the Edit menu. You can search for words you might overuse.

Tech Tool: Using Find to help in revision The Find feature can also show you if you have overused a certain type of sentence construction in your writing. Search for and, but, or, for, so to locate compound sentences. Mc. Kay portrayed the voices of the Jamaican people in these poems, and he idealized their way of life. Search for which or that to find complex sentences. Mc. Kay became an editor for The Liberator, which allowed him to reach a wider literary audience.

Proofreading and correcting your draft Proofread and correct your work to polish it for your audience. Regardless of your final publishing format, your final product should be legible and error-free. Even a single error can cause your audience to doubt the credibility of your information. During the “Red Summer” of 2919, 1919, Mc. Kay established a new purpose for his poetry.

Proofreading and correcting your draft Ask yourself these questions to guide your proofreading: 1. Have I used conventions of punctuation correctly, including italics, ellipses, and dashes? 2. Have I placed and punctuated my citations according to MLA or APA format? 3. Have I spelled all words correctly? Online dictionaries such as Your. Dictionary. com and Dictionary. com can help you check your spelling.

Talk About It Discuss these questions with your classmates. 1. In what order do you usually write the sections (introduction, body, conclusion) of a research paper? Why? What does this tell you about your writing? 2. Have you ever used a wiki to draft a paper? Would you try it in the future? Why or why not? 3. For what types of projects might you draft your work in a wiki? in a storyboard? 4. How could you use the Find feature in a wordprocessing program to edit your work? Think about words that you overuse or frequently misspell.

Your Turn Brainstorm a topic with which you are familiar. Then, storyboard a multimodal presentation about the topic. Include the following elements in your storyboard: • At least six slides • Descriptions or sketches of the content of each slide • Notations about audio and video components • Notes that show the audio narration that will accompany each slide

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