Date Language Paper 1 b inspired by Storm

Date Language Paper 1 b- inspired by Storm on the Island ‘You might think that the sea is company, Exploding comfortably down on the cliffs But no: when it begins, the flung spray hits The very windows, spits like a tame cat Turned savage. . . ’ Q 5 Creative Writing 40 marks (24 = content / 16= SPAG) 45 minutes

Example question- inspired by Heaney’s Storm on the Island Either: A geographical magazine editor has announced a writing competition. Write a description suggested by this picture. Or: Write an opening for a novel where it starts in a dangerous location.

The story The rough story goes like this: a dog walker goes to the beach and watches the sea lapping against the shore, taking comfort from a hard day at work. A storm approaches – we have a description of the storm in the distance- the dog walker realises he/she is trapped and attempts to escape. Section B: Question 5 (40 marks) Tips: üUse third person. üLink your ending to your opening. Structure: 1. Set the scene- where is the story set? What is the sea doing? 2. Shift inside the dog walker’s mind. 3. Describe the storm. 4. Allow an insight into the dog walker’s realisation that he/she is trapped. 5. Link your ending (resolution? ) to the beginning.

Taxi Tale (Teacher Example) LIGHT It had started as a fairly unremarkable day. The last light was fading away, and she could see Set the scene- where is the crimson light of the setting sun, glowing on the horizon. The sea hugged the shore the story set? What is possessively, refusing to let go even after a multitude of retreats back to its body. the sea doing? Light/weather/time of day? SHIFT Shift inside the dog walker’s mind. She stared passively at the white wash of the waves climbing up-shore. Every day was the same, she longed for more excitement; some danger. This wasn’t her usual dog-walk route, but she needed to hear the comforting sound of the water crashing onto land to take away the monotony of the day. Somewhere in the distance, a gull called. Her attention snapped back to the present, and she saw her dog nosing the air warily. Incoming Storm The sand was deserted- just the faint imprints of the day’s visitors to remain as evidence of Describe the storm as it their existence. The sea fought with the sand to claw back its precious sand and, within approaches. minutes, the imprints were gone. Nothing beside remained other than the vast body of water, her and her beloved spaniel. The dog lay at her feet, but something about him was restless. The hairs on his spine stood to attention, and his snout was pointed toward the sky, sniffing something out. The red light had dropped beneath the horizon, and a phantom grey had consumed the sky. No stars. No moonlight. Simply darkness. Rain began to pummel the sand sea, with immediacy and the ocean roared defensively. The dog whined, and she covered her face with her anorak to protect her from the sharp spattering of rain that lashed at her skin. Internal conflict Allow an insight into the dog walker’s realisation that he/she is trapped. THE REVEAL Link your ending (resolution? ) to the beginning. She looked all around her. What she had previously assumed to be her tranquil shelter, had taken her captive. The dog panted, and brushed against her leg, and she placed a hand on his back, attempting to reassure him. But he knew her, and he knew it was feigned. The sea began to explode against the rocks, spitting spray in every direction. The spaniel pulled with desperation on his lead, trying to persuade her that they had to leave. But she froze, She could not see the way out.

Your turn LIGHT Set the scene- where is the story set? What is the sea doing? Light/weather/time of day? SHIFT Shift inside the dog walker’s mind. Incoming Storm Describe the storm as it approaches. Internal conflict Allow an insight into the dog walker’s realisation that he/she is trapped. THE REVEAL Link your ending (resolution? ) to the beginning.