Cambyses Feedback Lesson Persian Kings Cambyses Assessment Follow

Cambyses Feedback Lesson

Persian Kings; Cambyses – Assessment Follow Up L. O. to assess areas of weakness in assessments, and improve on these.

10 marker - Using details from Passage A and your own knowledge, what can we learn about the nature of Cambyses as King? (10) How many of the ticks did you answer achieve? What are the areas you need to keep working on? What was I really happy to see! ü Lots of people making points about Cambyses being a disrespectful king. ü Lots of people making points about Cambyses being a cruel king. Areas to keep working on! Ø Use your own knowledge, to give historical examples from other times Cambyses demonstrated similar behaviour to the point you’re making. ü A sacrilegious king, for both Egyptian AND Persian religion Ø Be more specific about what we can learn about Cambyses’ nature, so that you don’t repeat your ideas. ü A good military leader, as he’d clearly won battles! Ø Include quotes for each point you make. ü Accurate quotes, where it was explained HOW they prove the point. Ø Make sure that your response sticks close to the angle/ topic of the question…. e. g. the NATURE of Cambyses, not just general stuff.

15 Marker - 4. Using details from Passage A and your own knowledge, how different was Cambyses’ policy towards foreign peoples from that of Cyrus? (15) What did I expect to read? ü A point discussing whether both were respectful of other people’s religions. ü A point discussing whether both were respectful of foreign leaders. ü A point discussing the treatment of peoples once they were within the empire. ü A quote for at least 2 of the points of discussion ü A conclusion as to whether the two kings’ policies were more similar, or different. BONUS POINT – issues of reliability surrounding Cambyses. How many of these 5 expectations did you achieve? If you missed some, why do you think that was? TASK: read the example answer to this question. It’s NOT perfect, but it is a really good effort. 1. Underline/ highlight where any of the 6 ticks are achieved in the answer. 2. Underline/ highlight where each paragraph links back to the question. 3. Write down one way in which this answer could be improved.

4. Using details from Passage A and your own knowledge, how different was Cambyses’ policy towards foreign peoples from that of Cyrus? (15) I would argue that Cambyses’ policies towards foreign peoples was different to Cyrus’. The first point to consider is that Cambyses unlike his father was disrespectful to the people. In passage A, Cambyses is shown being disrespectful to the Persian God which was Fire. This is shown in the quote ‘this was an unholy thing to do because Persians believed that Fire was a God and never burned their dead’. He also killed the Apis bull (Patar in bull form) and mocked the bull for bleeding. This is different to his father Cyrus who linked and respected the Gods of the countries which he took over. This is shown when Cyrus linked himself to Marduk a Babylonian God. This proves that Cambyses policies were different. The second point to consider is that Cambyses didn't respect the rulers of the countries he invaded, this is shown in passage A where it says ‘treated with every possible indignity’. Cambyses desecrated Amasis' body, he whipped his body and pulled out all of his hair. This shows Cambyses didn't treat other kings as equals or respect them, whereas Cyrus kept Croesus the king of Lydia alive and as a close adviser, and respected his opinion. This proves that Cambyses’ policies were different to Cyrus’ policies. Although there were debates whether the reliability of the sources Herodotus used were biased against Cambyses. His sources could have been priests who were banished or had their taxes removed from temples which they worked in. A source who spoke highly about Cambyses was Udjahorresnet, an Egyptian priest, who converted to Cambyses’ side during the war. He said that Cambyses removed corruption from the law and he lead the Apis bull’s funeral as Pharaoh of Upper Egypt and Lower Egypt, which was a great honour, which could say that his policies were the same as Cyrus’.

15 Marker - 4. Using details from Passage A and your own knowledge, how different was Cambyses’ policy towards foreign peoples from How thatcanof. I make Cyrus? (15) sure it’s not just How can I improve my 15 marker? Remember, with a 15 marker, you're answering a question, not giving a summary. Try to write an response that continuously focuses on answering that specific question. Could be on similarities/differences, changes over time, impacts/consequences, causes of an event, the significance of an event or person. another 10 marker answer? Ask yourself these 4 question, if the answer to any is NO, it’s something your response needs to improve upon! 1. Are there links between the different points your making, that you could identify and explain to make your response look more like a focused answer? 2. Do you link back to the question at the end of each paragraph, making it clear that you're always looking to answer the question? 3. Does the language you use to start each make it feel like a continuous answer, or does each paragraph feel like a stand alone? 4. Do you come to a conclusion at the end, that makes it clear which is the factors you said is the best example of difference/the most important impact/ the most significant event, etc?