Before Class 1 Pens 2 Notebook 3 Worksheet
Before Class • • 1. Pens 2. Notebook 3. Worksheet(学习单) 4. Good mood (心情) for the class
Free talk • So far, who has influenced(影响) you most?
Check the exercise (worksheet, A 1) Good friends are like stars. You don’t always see them, but you know they are there. As for me, my best friend Betty has influenced me most in the past few years. I remember the day when I sat in silence ______(silent) at the corner of the playground after exams. I didn’t do well in my schoolwork and gettingseparated _______(separate) from my old friends made me even _____(lonely). I didn’t know what I could do. I wondered more lonely whether/if ____ my parents would regret spending so much money in that getting me to such a good school. I’m sure ______ I have been trying hard. However, I don’t know why school lessons seemed like a wall that was impossible to go through. I had a really hard time. At the passed moment, a girl ______(pass) me and turned back. “would it be OK to give you a hug? ” she looked at me with ______a smile. On hearing what she said, I was about cry. I felt the ______(touch) of something touch bright and friendly. We started to talk with each other. Day by day, she included me in her circle of friends. Now she is my best friend. Every time I’m in trouble, she will encourage me and give me a hand without a second thought. We glue stick together like ______(glue). I think friends play an important role in our life and that a life without a friend is a life without a sun.
Read and think: How many parts are there? Beginning Body (the story) Feelings/ comments How to write about the person who has influenced you most?
How to write the beginning? Which question will you answer in the first paragraph? • A. Who was the story about? • B. What happened? • C. How did the writer feel? Think and write down the person who has influenced you most. (学习单A 3)
How to write the body (the story)? Complete the table. (学习单A 2) When did the story happen? One day after exams Where did the story happen? at the corner of the playground Why did the story happen? I didn’t do well in my schoolwork and getting separated from my old friends made me even more lonely. What happened? A girl offered a hug to me and we became good friends.
Let’s try! Think about a story between you and the person who has influenced you most. (学习单A 4) When did the story happen? Where did the story happen? Why did the story happen? What happened? share your story!
How to write the body (the story)? How does the writer make this moment so detailed(详细)? At that moment, a girl passed me and turned back. “would it be OK to give you a hug? ” she looked at me with a smile. At that moment, a girl offered me a hug. Tip 1: Try to use more verbs(动词) to make your important moment more vividly(生动) and detailed(详细). 多使用动词来详细生动地描述你的重要时刻。 Write the moment between you and him/her in details. (学习单A 5)
How to write the body (the story)? How does the writer make her feelings so detailed(详细)? I didn’t know what I could do. I wondered if my parents would regret spending so much money in getting me to such a good school. I’m sure that I have been trying hard. However, I don’t know why school lessons seemed like a wall that was impossible to go through. I had a really hard time. object clauses On hearing what she said, I was about cry. I felt the touch of something bright and friendly. adjectives Tip 2: Try to use object clause (宾语从句) and more adj. (形容词) to make your feelings more detailed. 尝试使用宾语从句和形容词来具体描述你的感受。 Try to Write your feelings in details. (学习单A 6)
How to write the ending? Now she is my best friend. Every time I’m in trouble, she will encourage me and give me a hand without a second thought. We stick together like glue. I think friends play an important role in our life and that a life without a friend is a life without a sun. What do you think of him/her?
Summary Beginning Who is the person? Tip 1: Try to use more. Simple verbs( 动词) to make your present important moment more tense(一般� vivid(生动) and detailed(详细). 在�) 多使用动词来详细生动地描述你的重要时刻。 When? Useful expressions: A person who Where At themore moment, adj. ( look Tip 2: Try to use object Body clause(the (宾语从句) and at sb with smile, feel has influenced ? story) 形容词) to make your feelings more detailed. the touch of me most Why? something bright, be Simple past 尝试使用宾语从句和形容词来具体描述你的感受。 about cry … What? tense(一般 �去�) How? Feelings/ comments Simple present tense(一般�在 What do you think of him/her?
Writing 我们每个人都生活在亲人,友人和老师的关怀和呵护中。 亲情,友情和师情是阳光,照亮我们的生活,似露水滋润我们的 心田。请以“The person who has influenced me most”为题,讲述 你与她或他的故事,并谈谈你对相应的亲情,友情或师情的感受 与你的观点。 注意: 1. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 2. 100词左右。 Structure of the passage Beginning The person who has influenced me most is … Body What happened? When and where did the story happen? Why did it happen? How did you feel? … Ending What do you think of him or her?
Writing Checklist (�价表 ) 1. Have you included all information of the structure list? 是否已�涵盖了所有框架表里的内容? 2. Do you use more verbs (�� ) to make your important moment more vivid(生� ) and detailed(�� )? 是否使用更多的��使故事描写更加生�具体? 3. Do you use object clause (��从句) or more adj. (形 容� ) to make your feelings more detailed? 是否使用��从句或者形容�来具体描写感受? 4. Do you use the person, tense, spelling correctly? 人称,��,拼写是否正确使用?
Writing Useful expressions: At the moment, look at sb with smile, feel the touch of something bright, be about cry, I wonder if…
Checklist (�价表 ) 1. Have you included all information of the structure list? 是否已�涵盖了所有框架表里的内容? 2. Do you use more verbs (�� ) to make your important moment more vivid(生� ) and detailed(�� )? 是否使用更多的��使故事描写更加生�具体? 3. Do you use object clause (��从句) or more adj. (形 容� ) to make your feelings more detailed? 是否使用��从句或者形容�来具体描写感受? 4. Do you use the person, tense, spelling correctly? 人称,��,拼写是否正确使用?
Exchange(交� ) and appreciate(欣� ) Checklist (�价表 ) 1. Have you included all information of the structure list? 是否已�涵盖了所有框架表里的内容? 2. Do you use more verbs (�� ) to make your important moment more vivid(生� ) and detailed(�� )? 是否使用更多的��使故事描写更加生�具体? 3. Do you use object clause (��从句) or more adj. (形 容� ) to make your feelings more detailed? 是否使用��从句或者形容�来具体描写感受? 4. Do you use the person, tense, spelling correctly? 人称,��,拼写是否正确使用?
Must do: Polish your writing. (润色作文) Choose to do: Read the sample in 《词不离句》and find out some useful expressions.
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